Talk:Crocodiles (album)/GA1

GA Review

• Firstly, just as a note for the future, the GA reviewer generally creates this page... you just need to add the template to the talk page. :)
  • Ah you're right! Just noticed that when I double checked, I'll remember for next time!
• "Singles released by the band and included on the album" - bleh... could you trim this to something like "SINGLE 1 and SINGLE 2 were released as singles"... it's a bit wordy as is.
  • Done
• "was produced by Ian Broudie and by Bill Drummond and David Balfe." - overuse of "and", etc.
  • Reworded to try to show that Drummond and Balfe produced the album and Broudie produced "Rescue".
• "author Chris Adams said that in 1980 Creem magazine had written" - took me a while to work out what was being said here... perhaps "in 1980 Cream magazine wrote..." or another reword?
  • Reworded. I had originally used that to try to show it was a tertiary source.
• "Although Sergeant was less happy and said" - starting a sentence with "although" is weird...
  • Removed "Although"
• "the following year, 1990." - you say 1989 last sentence, so you don't need to say the year here... it's pretty clear.
  • Fixed
• The Commons template isn't really appropriate, and does MTV have permission to post up those lyrics (otherwise copyvio issues)?
  • Removed commons (legacy of an earlier editor) and yes MTV have a licence for lyrics.

The rest seems good! giggy _(:O) 11:52, 13 June 2008 (UTC)

• Thanks --JD554 (talk) 14:03, 13 June 2008 (UTC)