Talk:Crusader states/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 09:27, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Starting soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 09:27, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria
GA Criteria: 1 1.a Y 1.b Y 2 2.a Y 2.b Y 2.c Y 2.d Y 3 3.a Y 3.b Y 4 4.a Y 5 5.a Y 6 6.a Y 6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
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• No missing citations N:

  Consolidation in the first half of the 12th-century established four crusader states:/The County of Edessa (1098–1149)/The Principality of Antioch (1098–1268)/The Kingdom of Jerusalem, founded in 1099, lasted until 1291, when the city of Acre fell./The County of Tripoli (1104–1289, although the city of Tripoli itself remained in Muslim control until 1109) Seems like citation for all might be on the Tripoli one, if so please add it to the end of all of them and the end of the colon before the list. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 17:21, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Discussion

• @Norfolkbigfish: Citational issues need to be dealt with; article is otherwise good to go. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:53, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

• Thanks for cutting me some slack @Iazyges:, but I checked the citation and it was in fact only for Tripoli. Now added for the other states as well. Norfolkbigfish (talk) 09:43, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

  @Norfolkbigfish: No problem. Wondering if I might ask you to review my FAC nom Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Marcian/archive2 if you have the time. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 17:45, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Prose Suggestions

Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.

Lede

• with more serious offences dealt with by the Frankish cour des bourgeois. explain what cour des bourgeois means for those who don't know French.

• Y done Norfolkbigfish (talk) 09:43, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Economy

• Franks, Muslims, Jews and indigenous Christians traded crafts in the souks of the cities. explain what a souk is.

• Y done Norfolkbigfish (talk) 09:43, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Coinage

• Despite lords in Tyre, Sidon and Beirut minting silver pennies and copper coins there is little evidence of systematic attempts to create a unified currency. suggest Although lords in Tyre, Sidon and Beirut minted silver pennies and copper coins there is little evidence of systematic attempts to create a unified currency.

• Y done Norfolkbigfish (talk) 09:43, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Communes

Largely based in the ports of Acre, Tyre, Tripoli and Sidon, Italian, Provençal and Catalan communes suggest Largely based in the ports of Acre, Tyre, Tripoli and Sidon, communes of Italians, Provençals and Catalans

• Y done Norfolkbigfish (talk) 09:43, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Language

• As such, linguistic differences remained a key differentiator suggest As such, linguistic differences remained a key differentiator between the Frankish lords and the local population.

• Y done Norfolkbigfish (talk) 09:43, 7 April 2020 (UTC)