Talk:Cullen House/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Girth Summit in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:50, 16 April 2020 (UTC)Reply


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  • "since 1600" would it make more sense to say this about the originally completed house, i.e. since 1602?
  Done
  • Cullen is overlinked.
  Done
  • " fourteen separate homes" to avoid repeating separate, and to avoid "home" (as that is where the heart is) perhaps "fourteen individual dwellings"?
  Done
  • You go from "large house" in the lead to "very large ... mansion" in the first main section....
  Done
  • "The house started as an L-plan tower house," try not to repeat house, perhaps building or edifice?
  Done
  • " (for Sir Walter Ogilvy" (a) I wouldn't put this in parentheses and (b) I'd say "representing Sir Walter..." to avoid for for issues.
  Done
  • " Georgian sash and case" any way of avoiding the next door neighbour blue links? And ought not window be in the link?
  Done
  • "Baronialized" any reason for the USEng z rather than s?
See the discussion above with Gog the Mild. I'm not wedded to this spelling, and will happily change it to an s if you think that better, but my semi-competent survey suggests that this is the most common spelling in academic publications (I guess due to Oxford, rather than the US).
  • "century, featuring two" split here, lengthy with many run-ons. "century. It features..."
  Done
  • Burn of Cullen vs Cullen Burn. I guess interchangeable but just wondering if we should stick with one?
  Done on the proviso that one of the refs refers to it as the Burn of Cullen in the title. Yes, interchangeable - rough majority towards Cullen Burn in the sources;
  • Grand Entrance in italics, why?
I got carried away, removed.
  • "James Adam " is overlinked.
  Done
  • You already linked rampant (lions that is).
  Done
  • " by James Playfair i" no need to repeat James.
  Done
  • History section overlinks: James, James Playfair (avoid that first name repeat too), Cullen Old Church, William Robertson, Baronial Revival and David Bryce.
  Done
  • "style; these" break here.
  Done
  • 'through town of Cullen itself" the town.
  Done
  • "Scotland - Aberdeenshire" en-dash.
  Done
  • Bullet point for external link.
  Done

That's it for my first run. On hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:28, 16 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

The Rambling Man - thanks, I've addressed most of the points, just the question on z or s in Baronialized - there is some discussion on the talk page about that, please take a look at let me know if you want me to change it - I don't feel strongly either way. GirthSummit (blether) 07:41, 17 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
You missed the en-dash I pointed out (and I missed one too) so they're fixed, and I'm not too stressed about "barioniali(s/z)e", although a grand total of fewer than 300 Ghits for both combined probably means that it's sub-optimal in either spelling! If there's another way of writing it, I'd consider it, but I'll leave that to you and perhaps the wider community who are much more in the know than me. So I'll promote. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 07:53, 17 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
The Rambling Man, sorry about the en dash - I definitely fixed an en dash, must have been a different one! I'm not great at dashing, in any sense of the word... Thanks again for the review, stay safe. GirthSummit (blether) 07:57, 17 April 2020 (UTC)Reply