Talk:Cyclone Gretelle

GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 18:13, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

Hello Hurricanehink! I will be reviewing this article you nominated, Cyclone Gretelle. Judging by your past GANs, this shouldn't take too long to review. If you have any questions, refer to my talk page, contact me on Facebook, or IRC.--12george1 (talk) 18:13, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• "Gretelle developed from the intertropical convergence zone on January 19, and gradually intensified while moving southwestward." - The ITCZ developed into Gretelle? Maybe say "within" the ITCZ or "from a disturbance" in the ITCZ.

• I like "within". --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:37, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• "wind gusts and heavy rainfall in mountain regions." - Not sure about this, but I think it should be "mountainous regions"

• That works. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:37, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• The lead is oddly structured. Why do you have MH and impact for Réunion and Mozambique mixed together in the first paragraph, but just impact in Madagascar in the second paragraph? Maybe just make a paragraph for MH and a paragraph for impact?

• That's intentional, actually. The impact for Reunion and Mozambique is fairly minor. I wanted an entire paragraph to focus on Madagascar, since that is the brunt of the article. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:37, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• Alright, I will make an exception this time.--12george1 (talk) 19:56, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• "the MFR upgraded Gretelle to tropical cyclone status, or with 10–minute 10–minute sustained winds of at least 120 km/h (75 mph)." - "10-minute 10-minute sustained winds"? Never heard of such a thing! :P

• o.O ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:37, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• "wind peak of 215–km/h (130 mph) at 0600 UTC on January 24" - What's with that dash in there?

• Oops, wrong spacing thing. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:37, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• "Although it approached southeastern Africa on January 28, an approaching trough turned the storm to the southeast." - It might be a bit confusing having two "approached"/"approaching"s in there. Maybe re-word the first part to something like, "Although the storm headed toward southeastern Africa on January 28". Unless, of course, you have another "approach" to this situation. :P

• Changed second to "advancing trough". Forward! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:37, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• "Gretelle dissipated on January 31 well to the south of Madagascar." - But the lead said southwest of Madagascar

• It's more SSW, which I changed both to. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:37, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• Impact and aftermath is good! :)
• In regards to references from ReliefWeb, why didn't you add |work= ? For example, on reference #5, I think you should add |work=United Nations Department of Humanitarian Affairs.

• I put them in as agency, but I didn't realize they didn't show up. As such, I changed them to "work". ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:37, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• Oh, I didn't check to see if they were |agency=. Anyway, thanks for fixing this.--12george1 (talk) 19:56, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• You accessed reference #15 in the future? It says "Retrieved 2014-01-27." :P

• Time travel is possible! >:( ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:37, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• Is it? :P --12george1 (talk) 19:56, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

• On a serious note, I am going to pass this article and list it as a GA. As you stated above, Forward! Good luck on the WikiCup, btw.--12george1 (talk) 19:56, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

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