Talk:Cyclone Haruna/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Hurricanehink in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 20:56, 3 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Hello, Hurricanehink. I will be reviewing Cyclone Haruna, using my typical section by section format. Please respond to each comment so I can make sure that my concerns were corrected. Thanks in advance. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 20:56, 3 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • "...that produced widespread flooding and disease outbreak..." → Since disease outbreaks are a limited, confined event and not a "general occurrence," I would suggest saying 'a disease outbreak' and not the way it is presented currently.
  • "...Haruna developed in the Mozambique channel in the middle of February 2013..." → Since Mozambique Channel in its entirety is a proper noun, please capitalize 'channel.'
    • Disagreed. We've been told before on FAC that stuff like "Florida Panhandle" and "Yucatan Peninsula" shouldn't have the second word capitalized. It's not a complete proper noun. The first part is proper, but the latter bit is a common thing. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:14, 3 August 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "...between Madagascar and southeastern Madagascar." → So it developed in an island between a portion of the island the the entire island itself? I think you mean Mozambique, :P. And since you would have Mozambique in this sentence you would link it here and not the next sentence.
  • "It weakened significantly while crossing the country, and MFR discontinued advisories on February 24." → You should note that Haruna survived the Madagascar trek and was in the Indian Ocean for a period of time before dissipating.
  • "Haruna killed 26 people and injured 127 directly..." → Is there a count for indirect injuries? TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 20:56, 3 August 2013 (UTC)Reply

Meteorological history

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Impact and aftermath

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All in all this is a pretty good article. Will pass when the issues are fixed.

Thanks for review! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 23:14, 3 August 2013 (UTC)Reply