Talk:Cyclone Hollanda/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanefan25 (talk · contribs) 11:59, 11 October 2011 (UTC)

Please bear with me hink, I'm going to do my best to review this article. :) It might take a few days to finish, sorry. HurricaneFan25

I'll be doing a prose/writing around 14:00 UTC. Gotta bounce. HurricaneFan25 12:04, 11 October 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments:

• "...in the middle of the Indian Ocean." (lede) "In the middle" sounds a bit awkward.
  • We regularly use that in the Atlantic (in the middle of the Atlantic Ocean, Gulf of Mexico, Caribbean Sea). Would you recommend "central" instead? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
    • Yep, that's fine. HurricaneFan25 13:39, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
      • Alright, I clarified. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:42, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
• "Hollanda destroyed or severely damaged 450 houses" (lede) Why not use "and"?
  • Oh, that wouldn't be true. It destroyed or heavily damaged the 450. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
• Why not link to the Cyclone Ivy subsection in the 90/95 article? (lede)
  • Good call. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
• "...organized convection, or thunderstorms." (MH) You've linked to convection, and it basically tells what convection is, so there's no need to write "or thunderstorms".
  • Alright, that works. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
• "...as it moved more poleward" (MH) what does "poleward" mean?
  • Toward the pole, either north or south pole depending on the hemisphere. I feel it's a pretty common word, but I can change it if you want. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
• "...and about half without telephone." (impact) Sounds a bit weird, put "service" at the end of the sentence?
  • Good cal1! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
• "...cyclone killed two people[4]" (impact) Add punctuation before the ref, a comma would suffice.
  • MK. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
• Ref #10 appears to be broken ("Colin Legum/2000")

• Ref #15 is broken ("Economist Intelligence Unit/1995")
  • I fixed both. It was an issue of spacing in cite web. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:37, 11 October 2011 (UTC)

Happy to pass. :) HurricaneFan25 13:42, 11 October 2011 (UTC)