Talk:Cyclone Phet/GA1
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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 06:01, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
Will do. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:01, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
- Put the year somewhere in the lead since it's not part of the title. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:26, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
- Ah, good catch. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:06, 18 December 2016 (UTC)
- Mind noting when Phet dissipated in the lead? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:26, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
- Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:06, 18 December 2016 (UTC)
- "110 and 120 km/h (70–75 mph) " why not be consistent and go with "110–120 km/h"? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:26, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
- That works! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:06, 18 December 2016 (UTC)
- "After the heavy damage from Cyclone Gonu in 2007, Omani residents were better prepared during Phet.[20]" how? without context, this borders on WP:NPOV. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:26, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
- Good call. I removed that sentence, since the next one mentions Gonu as well. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:06, 18 December 2016 (UTC)
- "Impact" to "Impact and aftermath" since you're also talking about aftermath.
- Agreed. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:06, 18 December 2016 (UTC)
- "According to Oman's National Committee for Civil Defence, Phet killed 16 people in the country,[19] although the IMD reported the death toll at 24.[1]" why include the 16 if you're not using in the table/lead? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:26, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
- It was the total from Oman's official disaster agency. It's worth noting the uncertainty. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:06, 18 December 2016 (UTC)
- "and 1.8 tons of medicine.[52]" what kind of tons? imperial or metric and convert units, if necessary. YE Pacific Hurricane 06:26, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
- Ah, I was afraid this would come up. The source didn't specify, ditto when I mentioned tons later for the Omani relief. Since the exact numbers aren't needed, I removed them. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:06, 18 December 2016 (UTC)
- "to 180 millimetres (7.1 in)" why is this spelled out when you don't spell out the first unit in the rest of the article? YE Pacific Hurricane 06:26, 15 December 2016 (UTC)
- It said abbbr=on :P ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:06, 18 December 2016 (UTC)
@Yellow Evan: Hope it's better now. Hurricanehink mobile (talk) 04:44, 19 December 2016 (UTC)
- Passing now. I held off since I wanted to pass yours and GC's GAN at the same time. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:22, 21 December 2016 (UTC)