Talk:Daara J/GA1

Latest comment: 16 years ago by Dihydrogen Monoxide in topic GA Review

GA Review

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  • Quite a few more images here if you want to make it look prettier. :)
    • Prettified.
  • "consisting of N'Dongo D, Aladji Man, and Faada Freddy." - do all three of them just rap? Or are there instruments and stuff?
    • None of my sources say what each of them do specifically, besides rap...
  • Lead could do with a split into paragraphs (Mostly because I like paragraphs. And it makes things easier to comprehend.)
    • Paragraphed and cut a bit.
  • "when all of its members were in high school,[1] where they were studying accountancy" - I've never seen a high school where you can specifically study something (like accounting...)...you sure this isn't a university?
    • See the radio interview; apparently they do things differently in Senegal. :)
  • "as well as Cuban music" - reading here, it sounds like Cuban music is a band... reword this sentence
    • Tweaked.
  • "Positive Black Soul, another Senegalese rap group, wanted Daara J to record and perform" - feels like there's something missing.... to record and perform with them?
    • Changed to "encourage"; don't think they ever formally performed together.
  • "praising the album for its lyrical content: "However, as Daara J show throughout Boomerang" - can you remove the however? It's kinda... weird, since it's not contradicting anything.
  • Not sure if the final Wikinews link is really necessary (says while doing this offline)... does it mention Daara J in any depth?