Talk:Daniel Radcliffe/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 97198 (talk) 08:04, 16 November 2010 (UTC)

Sorry, but I'm failing the GAN because the article still needs a fair amount of work:

• Lead section is far too short - it should summarise the entire contents of the article (see WP:LEAD)
• Numerous uncited facts throughout the article, and even an entire paragraph (his philanthropy) without any citations
• Vague, controversial (maybe WP:PEACOCK-y) claims such as The films continue to produce high box office results worldwide without explanation nor a source
• Some parts appear to need updating, like the 7th and 8th HP films (he's beyond just "signing on") and the other upcoming films and stage productions that he has been "reported" to star in
• Some explanations which seem obvious should still be given, such as Radcliffe was asked to audition for the role of Harry Potter - in what? You shouldn't expect the reader to know this is referring to the first film. As the opening sentence of the "Career" section, it should give a bit more information
• References need a bit of cleaning up - there shouldn't be any bare URLs, all online sources should have accessdates and where possible, try to link the work or publisher - basically, try your best to make all of the references consistent

Overall, it's a decent article, but there are still some issues that need to be cleaned up. It's not too far off, so I hope you'll be able to fix any problems and renominate the article. :) 97198 (talk) 08:04, 16 November 2010 (UTC)