Talk:Dark Horse (George Harrison album)/GA1

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 04:14, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply


GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    Lead should be expanded
    "in tatters," - this seems to be redundant
    "Harrison himself would remain an Apple artist until his EMI contract expired in January 1976," - What is Apple? I know it, but many won't probably
    "But as of early 1974, he still had no distributor lined up for either the Shankar Family & Friends album," - I would not start a sentence with "but", consider adding "however" after the date.
    "Plus, Harrison was working to seal" - plus is kind of colloquial, consider replacing with "Furthermore" or similar
    "Come 23 September, " - not sure what you mean
    "It's possible" - write it out
    "“Ring out the old, ring in the new”" - why italicized? And avoid curly quotations per MOS:QUOTEMARKS. I noticed you wrote in curly quotation marks, but you need to replace them with straight ones
    United Kingdom silver in "Shipments and sales" unsourced
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    I think it is fairly messy if you include a detailed referencing style all the time. How about adding a sepereated section with the full details, and then simply use a shorter style, eg "<ref>Leng, ''While My Guitar Gently Weeps: The Music of George Harrison'', p.200</ref> or maybe short footnotes. But it is up to you after all
    Use a consistent style throughout
    Bare urls should be fixed
    I strongly suggest to use the citation templates
    Don't forget the period behind p or pp
    "This was a very poor result for an artist of Harrison’s stature, and as an ex-Beatle, although Ringo Starr’s Beaucoups of Blues had similarly missed the cut in Britain back in 1970." looks like original research, maybe even a comment.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall: I will give you 10 days to fix those issues. Overall an interesting article.--GoPTCN 05:06, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    Pass/Fail:  
Fixed bare URLs. yeepsi (Time for a chat?) 10:55, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Just need to expand lead and find a ref for Silver, then prose should be done. Under what section is "Its possible"? yeepsi (Time for a chat?) 12:08, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I will pass this article. Nice work and collaboration! :)--GoPTCN 09:32, 23 June 2012 (UTC)Reply