Talk:Daron Acemoglu/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 01:06, 2 August 2018 (UTC)

Review

 Doing... Hello. I'll be reviewing this article. My initial observation is that this article is ripe for promotion. I'll go through each section and post here if there are any issues. I'll also be checking the sources to see if they are reliable. If possible, I'll go into them to see if the text is supported correctly. Stay put and thanks for waiting! MX (✉ • ✎) 01:06, 2 August 2018 (UTC)

Part 1

Overall comments: This is a great article as it stands. My biggest concern from Part 1 of the review is not the grammatical correction. Rather, it is the overuse of quotes, especially in the Views section. Per WP:QUOTE, editors are generally encouraged to write stuff in their own words. I would like to see a reduction of quotes before this review passes. Below are my concerns for Part 1; stay put for Part 2 (which will include source review, copyright analysis, etc.) MX (✉ • ✎) 20:29, 4 August 2018 (UTC)

Life

• was born in Istanbul, Turkey to Armenian parents – Please add DOB with a source too, assuming none of the sources citing this sentence already have the DOB somewhere. The DOB in the infobox is technically unsourced as it stands.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 21:43, 5 August 2018 (UTC)

• a well-known commercial lawyer and lecturer – "well-known" is a WP:WEASEL word. Please revise.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 21:43, 5 August 2018 (UTC)

• and Irma (d. 1991), principal of Aramyan Uncuyan, – why not redlink Aramyan Uncuyan per WP:REDLINK?

"The subject of the red link may be covered on another edition of Wikipedia. If such an article meets the English-language Wikipedia criteria and you are able to translate, then follow the procedures at Wikipedia:Translation; if not, {{underline}use a link to the article in the other edition of Wikipedia instead of or next to a red link}}. Such links can be made manually or by using the interlanguage link template [[{{{1}}}]]."

• a professor of Electrical Engineering and Computer Science at MIT – spell out MIT's name and link it. Use "MIT" moving forward.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 21:43, 5 August 2018 (UTC)

Academic career

• Acemoglu was lecturer in economics at the London School of Economics (LSE) – Use LSE only, since you already used it in the previous section.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 09:15, 6 August 2018 (UTC)

• He began lecturing at the Massachusetts Institute of Technology (MIT) in 1993 – Use MIT only, per previous comments.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 09:15, 6 August 2018 (UTC)

• Acemoglu was lecturer in economics – "was a lecturer"

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 09:15, 6 August 2018 (UTC)

• In 2014 he made $841,380 ... – fix amount to US$841,380 per MOS:CURRENCY.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 09:15, 6 August 2018 (UTC)

• editor of Econometrica, an influential academic journal published – remove "influential" per WP:WEASEL. You can rephrase it or remove it.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 09:15, 6 August 2018 (UTC)

• He has made significant contribution to the labor economics field – Does the source only assert or explain them? "Significant" may be on the eyes of the beholder, and pushing for WP:WEASEL. Also, please add an "s": "He has made significant contributions ..."

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:03, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

Publications

• argued that the its substantive contribution is the theoretical fusion – Please fix this sentence.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 08:24, 10 August 2018 (UTC)

• ideas of Barry Weingast and Douglass North which argued that – "... North, who argued that..."

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 08:24, 10 August 2018 (UTC)

• Edward Glaeser described it "enormously significant" – ... "described it as 'enormously significant' ..."

It's not a quote within a quote.----Երևանցի ^talk 08:24, 10 August 2018 (UTC)

• In his best known book, Why Nations Fail (2012) – How do we know it is the best-known book? Was it the best-selling one?

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:04, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• Warren Bass wrote of it in the Washington Post: – The Washington Post

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 08:24, 10 August 2018 (UTC)

• Ryan Avent, an editor at the Economist – The Economist

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 08:24, 10 August 2018 (UTC)

Views

• Paul Abrams noted that Why Nations Fail has been - remove link from Why Nations Fail per WP:OVERLINK. Keep an eye on other articles you linked multiple times (excluding lead) in case I missed more.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:14, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• Acemoglu's and Robinson's long-time collaborator Simon Johnson suggests – Ditto with Johnson.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:14, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• for the survival of the US as we know it. – Sounds uneyclopedic. Please rephrase.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 10:14, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• General comments: I personally think there is an over-use of quotes here and in the rest of the View sections, per our MOS:QUOTE policy. Please paraphrase most of them and only keep what you think might be lost in paraphrasing. Long quotations are generally not encouraged. I will need to go back once you've done this to check for grammar corrections since I decided to skip this part altogether until the issue is resolved.

 Doing...----Երևանցի ^talk 10:14, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

Recognition

• According to data collected by IDEAS/RePEc – Why not spell out to "Research Papers in Economics"?

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 18:05, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• and his long-time collaborator James A. Robinson as – Remove link from Robinson per WP:OVERLINK.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 18:05, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

Awards

• [Citaiton needed] – There is a [Citaiton needed] tag I added.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 18:10, 12 August 2018 (UTC)

• @Yerevantsi: Hello. Will you be able to get thorough the remaining points in the next 2-3 days? MX (✉ • ✎) 19:14, 20 August 2018 (UTC)

I'll try to complete it by tomorrow. ----Երևանցի ^talk 22:16, 21 August 2018 (UTC)

@MX: I've addressed most of the issues. Could you please respond to them. I won't be active for another 3 days. ----Երևանցի ^talk 19:28, 24 August 2018 (UTC)

@Yerevantsi: Quotes look good now. We can address the infobox section when you're back. Enjoy your weekend. MX (✉ • ✎) 19:44, 24 August 2018 (UTC)

@Yerevantsi: Hi, I hope you had a great weekend. Let's get the infobox section addressed before the end of the week. Cheers, MX (✉ • ✎) 19:15, 27 August 2018 (UTC)

Part 2

Copyright checkup

• Copyright checkup – There are high similarities between the sources and the text, but these matches are best of the heavy dependence on quotes, per Earwig's Copyvio Detector. This will be addressed independently in Part 1.

Infobox

• Infobox – Overall this is a great part of the article. Useful information is found that is easy for readers to find. Per WP:INFOBOXCITE, however, we highly advise editors to remove citations from the infobox and cite the information elsewhere in the article. Would you be able to do that? This prevents clogging sources, especially as the infobox grows.

 Done----Երևանցի ^talk 20:09, 27 August 2018 (UTC)

Needing sources

• He has authored hundreds of papers, – Maybe I missed it somewhere, but is the "hundreds" mentioned somewhere else in the article with an appropriate source?

 Done I mentioned it in the "Academic career" section with a reference.----Երևանցի ^talk 11:06, 23 August 2018 (UTC)

• Source-and-text integrity – Checked multiple sources and found no issue here. Assuming good faith for the rest of the sources I did not check and for foreign-language ones too.

Conclusion

Everything was addressed! Article passes. MX (✉ • ✎) 20:33, 27 August 2018 (UTC)