Talk:David Beckham Homme/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 05:07, 6 January 2013 (UTC)

I'll review. TBrandley ^{(what's up)} 05:07, 6 January 2013 (UTC)

• "by English footballer" clarification needed, did he design it, create it, develop it?

• All of the above.  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)

• "which also included" the word "also" does not seem necessary

• Well, it speaks of how it includes this fragrance, as well as other projects.  — Statυs (talk, contribs)

• "reflects" change to perhaps "reflected"

•  Done  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)

• Unlink "citrus" per WP:OVERLINK
• Same goes for "ginger", "pine", and "pepper"

• I really don't see a problem with linking them. Even if they are fairly common terms (depending on how much you know). I ran the article through "delink common terms" and it didn't unlink them.  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)

• Avoid short two sentences paragraphs for readability

•  Done  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)

• Due to the article's size, perhaps one paragraph should be removed from the lead, per WP:LEADLENGTH

•  Done  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)

TBrandley ^{(what's up)} 17:24, 11 January 2013 (UTC)

• It has been 8 days since I have fixed these issues.  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 09:12, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.