Talk:David Clyde/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:48, 5 August 2013 (UTC)

Comments

• Per WP:YEAR, 1973–75.
• "which ended at age 26 because of arm and shoulder injuries" and "he retired from baseball at age 26." ending the first and second para, somewhat repetitive.
• "Oddly enough, ..." not encyclopedic.
• Suddenly, you reference a couple of sentences at the end of the lead but none of the rest of it. Why?
• Texas Rangers is a WP:DAB link.
• So is perfectionist.
• "18-0" should be 18–0, but what does that mean to a non-expert like me, I'm guessing it means he played in 18 games and the team won all of the them?
• Publications like Sports Illustrated should be italicised.
• "some of whom billed Clyde as the "next Sandy Koufax"" some? Or just one in particular?
• Eastern League is a dab link too.
• Hall of Famer - which HoF?
• "35,000+" -> over 35,000 fans.
• "a rusty beginning" a little colloquial for an encyclopedia.
• If you link strike out, I'd link home run.
• After saying "earned run average" put (ERA) so when you then use the abbreviation on its own, it'll be clear what it means.
• " with 3-9 record" a 3–9 record.
• Check the other records.
• "18-33 win-loss" 18–33 win–loss record.
• "sensation[6][12]," refs after punctuation, quotes in quote marks.
• "due in part because of" due to, not due because of.
• "the New York Times" that's The New York Times.
• " ex teammate" ex-teammate
• Category for Sacramento Solos, I don't read anything about that in the article.

A few items to address so I'll put the item on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 13:28, 5 August 2013 (UTC)

I think I got everything. Thanks for the review. Secret ^account 19:03, 6 August 2013 (UTC)