Talk:David Mirkin/GA2

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Wizardman in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:35, 25 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

I'll review this article sometime today. Wizardman 15:35, 25 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

Here are the issues I found:

  • "and As of 2012" as of; I'd just remove the as of ideally though.
  • "Mirkin pitched to the series' story editors for several years without success, because" no comma needed.
  • "Mirkin had to film each episode in two days." was there a particular reason for that?
  • " to some the show's " some of
  • In the subsequent work section, three of four paragraphs start with "In [year]". Try mixing it up a bit.

Mostly minor nitpicks. I'll put the article on hold and will pass when fixed. Wizardman 03:58, 28 November 2012 (UTC)Reply