Talk:Daytona USA/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Crimsonfox (talk · contribs) 08:38, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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In progress, will update with comments CrimsonFox ^talk 08:38, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments by Crimsonfox

Overall it reads well and appears to cover everything, few nit picks on wording and some refs need fixing per below

Refs

• #3 - No article date, name should be capitalised
• #12 - Article title shouldn't have site name in
• #18 - No article date (Optional: Not archived)
• #20 - Needs all details
• #21-23 - Remove site name from article name, no access date
• #22-23 - No author, need to be distinguished from each other (Eg. Daytona USA - Review (PC))
• #25-16 - Need formatting correctly
• #46 - Name of the site is not the URL
• #56 - No access date

• • All refs fixed, except for #20. Not sure what you're looking for here. Red Phoenix ^talk 16:03, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

Gameplay

• The first sentence doesn't read very encyclopedia-like.
• "introduced the possibility of linking " - Be more certain in your wording (Eg. "Up to eight cabinets can be linked to...")
• "Sega originally planned to use actual car seats, but changed the seats before releasing the game" - Source needed

• • Fixed. The source on the seats is the same source as the whole paragraph. Red Phoenix ^talk 16:03, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

Development

• The first three paragraphs have only once source at the end, which is fine, but can you confirm if they are for the whole paragraph?
• First sentence doesn't read nicely
• The comment in the image caption regarding the linking is unnecessary and is already mentioned in the Gameplay section

• • Fixed. Yes, the sources at the end are for the whole paragraph; the book is an excellent source that covers the development in more rigor than any other source I've seen. Red Phoenix ^talk 16:03, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

• • At the time of release, GE Aerospace was actually under Martin Marietta, so I don't quite follow why the older name is used here? Is it to accommodate the link to the Wikipedia article on GE Aerospace? F355fan ^talk 16:18, 27 May 2024 (UTC)

Reception & legacy

• "(which are based strictly on sales achievements)" - I don't think this needs to be in brackets
  • Fixed. Red Phoenix ^talk 16:03, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

CrimsonFox ^talk 11:39, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

@Crimsonfox: other than ref #20, which I'm confused what you're looking for, all addressed. Red Phoenix ^talk 16:03, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

@Red Phoenix: Great work! Ref #20 that links to this article doesn't have a proper title, author, date, website etc. it's just "Archived copy" CrimsonFox ^talk 17:16, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

Oh, I see it now, haha. It doesn’t show up in VisualEditor because none of the refs in the review box do - #20 when VE is on was a Next Generation ref that was filled in. Anyway, filled in. Red Phoenix ^talk 19:45, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

Ah that would explain it, all done! Congrats! CrimsonFox ^talk 08:57, 7 September 2019 (UTC)