Talk:Dazzle camouflage/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk · contribs) 13:25, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on. I'll respond promptly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:42, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Prose

• Inconsistent: "p.89 and p. 89"

Added spaces where missing. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:59, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• Duplicate links to Winston Churchill, Royal Navy, periscope, Admiralty, and kamikaze

Removed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:59, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• First note doesn't make sense.

Made use of note in text. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:47, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• "Art history" should be relabeled "Arts"

Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:47, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• Expand the contractions in the article

Done any that might be tricky; "HMS", "USS" and "SS" are usual in ship articles, hope that's all right: can add notes if desired. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:52, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

@Chiswick Chap: I meant to expand the contraction "don't".--Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 15:19, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Aha. There's one in a comment, now expanded, and one in an article title, left alone. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:29, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

References

• You don't need both oclcs and isbns for one source

Two OCLCs removed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:56, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• Eighth source requires an issn.

Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:56, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• Citation #14 lacks a page number

Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:03, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• Citation #20 should be expanded

Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:06, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

More later.--Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 13:25, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• • Passing, well done.--Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 16:08, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Thank you very much! Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:11, 27 July 2015 (UTC)