Talk:Debasement Tapes/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Miyagawa in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 18:00, 1 March 2016 (UTC)Reply


Grabbing this for a review. Miyagawa (talk) 18:00, 1 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Ok, review time.

  • "Veronica discovers that Desmond’s bag was actually switched with another person’s bag" - you can drop the "bag" from the end of the sentence as I think it's pretty inherent and it'll reduce the repetition.
  • Having the citation in the middle of the sentence at the start of production just looks really messy. I understand why it's there (as I presume that you're intending to show which parts of that sentence are cited to which. So could you throw in a comma at the same place just so that it follows a punctuation mark?
  • Production and Reception are interestingly written.
  • No duplicate links.
  • Image licence is good.
  • References are all good, although I recommend archiving the rest of the web citations.
  • @Miyagawa: I have fixed all your concerns. I moved that first citation to the end of the sentence. I decided only to archive a few of the links (the ones that I know are likely to move or be erratic), but if you insist, I will do the same with all of them. Thanks! Johanna(talk to me!) 03:02, 3 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • @Johanna: Thanks. I should have said - the archive stuff wasn't a requirement for the GA, just some advice. I get twitchy about web citations as for the Star Trek stuff which had a great website with historical archives called TrekWeb... which randomly and all of a sudden ceased to exist. Because of that we've lost a wealth of knowledge for the 2000 to 2010 period, which isn't covered by a lot of other sources. I digress, good choice on the citation. Happy to pass. Miyagawa (talk) 08:23, 3 March 2016 (UTC)Reply