Talk:Decoded (EP)/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:05, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
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I will start on this very soon! --K. Peake 08:05, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake, Thanks! ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:40, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
edit- Are you sure the EP's release date can't be used for "Gratify" in the infobox since it was released for the song?
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:43, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "released by" → "It was released by"
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:43, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "has six songs written by" → "consists of six songs, which were written by" to be more specific
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:43, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "received a generally positive reception." are you sure this is correct since the source cited in the body mentions widespread acclaim? Also, remove the a and add at the end "from music critics".
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:43, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
Composition
edit- Retitle to Composition and lyrics
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Img looks good
- Good! ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "has six tracks performed by" → "has six tracks, with them being performed by"
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Target pop to Pop music
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Wikilink soprano
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Target 4-octave to Octave
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "Scardey Kat, and The Vivienne," → "Scardey Kat and The Vivienne," since this article is not in American English
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Target dance to Dance music
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Shouldn't Out in Jersey be italicised?
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "and Cook described" → "while Cook described"
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
Release and promotion
edit- "The EP was released on" → "Decoded was released on"
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "of "A Drag Race Song" on" → "of "A Drag Race Song" as the lead single on" with the wikilink, for being specific because otherwise it is not clear what type of release the song had
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "included the song in her" → "included the song on her"
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Target 12" to Twelve-inch single
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "was released on 26 June 2020." → "was released on 26 June."
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
Music videos
edit- Img looks good
- Good! ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "The lead single's music video was" → "The music video for "A Drag Race song" was"
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "on 4 December," → "on 4 December 2020,"
- Done But I think you meant "2019" here. ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "The visual has tropes" → "The visual features tropes"
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Wikilink lip sync
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "and said the video" → "and said that it"
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "the second single for the album" → "the second single from the EP" with the target
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
Reception
edit- Retitle to Critical reception since that is the only form of reception here
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "The EP received a generally positive reception" → "Decoded was met with generally positive reviews" or should it be widespread acclaim per my earlier comment?
- Done I don't think we should place emphasis on "acclaim" since only one source says so. ---Another Believer (Talk) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Target music critics to Music journalism
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "also called the opening track" → "also called the former" because it is not written out anywhere here that song is the opening track
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Remove target on Billboard
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Remove "on the track" since we already know the reviewer is referencing it from the start of the sentence
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "He said Decoded" → "He said the EP"
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- "and showcases the singer's" → "and showcases the drag queen's" because she is not known as a singer; but maybe change to mentioning it showcases her versality "as a singer" or something similar?
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Wikilink electronica
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
Track listing
edit- No source is provided for the writing credits
- Yeah, another editor removed the sources, which I've added back. ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:55, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
Reception
edit- Retitle to References
- LOL oops! Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Copyvio score looks moderately good at 30.6%
- Like ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Apple Store → Apple Music (AU) on ref 1
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Cite AllMusic as publisher instead for ref 2, removing the other one
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Apple Store → Apple Music (GB) on refs 7, 11 and 13
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Remove the publisher from ref 8
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Cite AllMusic as publisher instead for ref 14
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
External links
edit- Good
- Like ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:55, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
Final comments and verdict
edit- On hold until the issues are fixed, but I must comment that you do have some good writing skills for sure! --K. Peake 09:55, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake, Thanks! ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Another Believer My pleasure to have took on this review for you and also have received such a timely response; I did some copy editing for areas where I did not request changes to be implemented during the review because they did not arise properly until you had made the suggested edits. ✓ Pass now after my contributions to your already strong work! --K. Peake 16:12, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake, Thanks! ---Another Believer (Talk) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.