Talk:Delos L. Filer/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Doug Coldwell in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:20, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- "was a northern Michigan nineteenth" normally we have birth date/death date in the lead rather than this "nineteenth century" thing.
- Done
- "He was an owner of sawmills and related businesses. He was a physician" -> "He owned ..., and was a physician..."
- Done
- "public schools for his initial training when he grew up." link public school. What does "when he grew up" add?
- Done
- "New York District School' link?
- Done
- " $12,443" probably nearest $100 is sufficient.
- Done
- Spouse names are normally listed, along with the periods of marriage, in the infobox.
- Done
- "2,500 acres of land three miles " convert.
- Done
- "It contained mostly timber" well presumably the land contained trees, not timber at that time?
- Done
- "shingles" and "lath" what are they?
- Done
- "married 3 times" three.
- Done
- "His first married in" grammar fail.
- Done
- Some name abbreviations have a full stop, some don't.
- Done
- "of Milwaukee. The" later, you overlink Milwaukee but there you put Wisconsin, so that should go here and the subsequent use of Milwaukee won't need linking or the state.
- Done
- "the South and West" why capitalised? Where do these relate to?
- Done
- Bibliography doesn't need those line returns between each bullet.
- Done
- That's all I have on a quick pass. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:39, 20 September 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for review. Will get started on it. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:43, 20 September 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:13, 20 September 2021 (UTC)