Talk:Demi Lovato/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 15:02, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

• I'll review this.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:02, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

• No dismabiguation link issues.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:36, 26 May 2013 (UTC)
• There is one external link that is problematic according to the toolbox to the right.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:36, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

• I couldn't find an archive for that information, so I had to remove it.

• Fix ALLCAPS refs.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:51, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

   Done

  • What about this?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:54, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
    • 122. I fixed 119 and realized it was a quote.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:14, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
• Fix all Twitter refs to be more like 119 although including the quote is generally not done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:17, 1 June 2013 (UTC)

   Done, I just replaced them with a better reference.

• I apologize. But on a second readthrough, I am realizing the you have no critical commentary on any of her roles, performances, songs or albums. Without critical commentary, this is really just a proselized discography and filmography. The whole career section needs expansion in this regard. Although most of her awards are teen pop stuff there must be some critical analysis of her performances available in the PD. I am reconsidering my hold, but will give you a chance to respond before I do.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:50, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
  • Thanks for your feedback. I'll add some critical opinions of her works, and make sure that the additional issues you highlighted are corrected so the review doesn't have to be failed. I'll leave a message on your talkpage when I complete those tasks. WikiRedactor (talk) 17:34, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
    • Just leave a note here. I am watching.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:39, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
      • Okay, so I went through each career section and added some critical comments of her projects. (I tried to balance the overall favorable receptions with some minor criticism and areas of concern, to remain neutral.) Let me know what you think, and then we can work from there. Thanks again, WikiRedactor (talk) 16:20, 2 June 2013 (UTC)
        • I'll have a look.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:58, 2 June 2013 (UTC)
          • Looks O.K. Wish there was more critical commentary on her acting.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:49, 2 June 2013 (UTC)
            • Added some bits about her acting coming off as cheesy in the Disney movies.

WP:LEAD

• Why is a 2009 picture still the main image? The 2010 image is more recent and seems as good. I kind of understand why the 2012 images might not be preferred, but why 2009 over 2010? Can we find anything newer?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:36, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

• Unfortunately, the resolution for the 2010 picture is to poor to make it the main picture.

• Is there a way to expand or merge the final stubby paragraph?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:36, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

 Done

• Can you summarize her tours and awards in the LEAD?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:36, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

 Done

Early life and career beginnings

• Demetria Devonne Lovato s/b Lovato.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:10, 28 May 2013 (UTC)

 Done

• Lovato, alongside longtime friend Selena Gomez... Were they already longtime friends at age 7?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:10, 28 May 2013 (UTC)

 Done

• In 2006, she appeared on Prison Break, and on Just Jordan the following year. -->In 2006, she appeared on Prison Break, and she was on Just Jordan the following year.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:10, 28 May 2013 (UTC)

 Done

2007–08

Camp Rock and Don't Forget

• When did "Sonny with a Chance" debut?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:10, 28 May 2013 (UTC)

• The premiere date is mentioned in the following section, which gets into more detail about the series.

2009–10

Sonny With a Chance and Here We Go Again

• "All of the song's proceeds were sent to environmental charities to the Disney Worldwide Conservation Fund." seems ungrammatical.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:57, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done, reworded.

• "Its music incorporated acoustic styles, which she described to be similar to the work of John Mayer." Did Lovato play some type of guitar or other instrument?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:57, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done, no she didn't I reworded it to be a bit more clear.

• "Grey's Anatomy" name and date the episode. If it has a link, link to it and name the season. If not link to the season article.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:57, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done, added.

• If it was the season finale say so.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:57, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

• If you mean Grey's Anatomy, the episode was not the season finale.

2010–12

Personal struggles, acting hiatus, and Unbroken

• "She began working on the album in July 2010" ->She had begun working on the album in July 2010--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:06, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done, corrected.

2012–present

The X Factor and Demi

• "In March 2012, MTV aired a documentary special," Can you find any critical commentary about this from 3rd parties? All you have included is MTV refs.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:06, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done, replaced with Idolator.

• Were there stories in the press related to her having significant weight fluctuations due to her various disorders and treatments?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:06, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done, added a brief mention.

Philanthropy

• Do you mean "the Clean & Clear Brand-launched Joining the Surge"--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:51, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done, reworded.

Artistry

• Why is Rihanna unlinked?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:51, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done, linked.

Public image

• O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:51, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

• All her images need {{personality rights}}.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:56, 31 May 2013 (UTC)
• Each WP:CAPTION indicates a full sentence with the use of a period when none of them are.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:58, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done to all except the following two protected images: File:Demi Lovato 2, (Cropped).jpg and File:DemiLovatoApr09.jpg.

• Can you request an admin do the rest?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:54, 1 June 2013 (UTC)

• Sure thing, I asked a Commons user to do it, because apparently I am not an established user of the service.

• Let me know when these are done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:49, 2 June 2013 (UTC)

• The templates have been added to all pictures.

I am putting this article on hold. I will reevaluate it within 7 days.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 18:59, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

I am now PASSING the article. Good work.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:43, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.