Talk:Demonstration (Tinie Tempah album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: WikiRedactor (talk · contribs) 16:45, 13 April 2014 (UTC)

General —  Done

• One redirect link to address.
• Three external links to address.
• Please replaces the usages of "Tinie's" with "Tempah's". (Using his "surname" makes for a more formal, encyclopedic tone.)
• Please add a "Commercial performance" prose section and "Certifications" table section in the article.
• I would suggest writing out the dates in the citation templates.
• Please make sure that every citation has an access date.

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 18:35, 18 April 2014 (UTC)

@DepressedPer: Can you expand the "Commercial performance" section with information about the other chart positions listed in the "Charts" section? This would make the section a sold 1-2 paragraphs. I'd also like to see the access dates written in a consistent format, whether it be fully written out or abbreviated with numbers, then I'll be able to mark this section of the review as completed.

Fixed it! DepressedPer (talk) 23:52, 19 April 2014 (UTC)

Infobox —  Done

• I would suggest removing the "see release history" wikilink, since the "Release history" section is clearly noted in the table of contents.
• I would also suggest removing the citation for "Lover Not a Fighter", since it is already sourced in the body of the article.

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 05:21, 16 April 2014 (UTC)

Introduction —  Done

• Can you talk about the delays in the body of the article, so the reference in the first paragraph can be removed/relocated?
• After the "Certifications" section is created, you can remove the UK certification citation in the second paragraph.

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 04:15, 18 April 2014 (UTC)

Background and recording —  Done

• Can you clarify that No More Idols is a Chase & Status album?
• The Chase & Status sentences needs a reference to support it.

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 08:54, 17 April 2014 (UTC)

Writing and composition —  Done

Inspiration and themes

• Since they are pretty long, can you paraphrase those quotes and marge the remaining content into a single paragraph?

Music and lyrical content

• Can you break this monster paragraph into a couple smaller ones?
• Can you talk more about the genres you mention in the infobox, because I don't see any mention of them in the body right now.
• Also, this entire section is unsourced; please add citations for each sentence.

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 23:52, 19 April 2014 (UTC)

@DepressedPer: Do you mean to use this YouTube reference for the last sentences of the first and third paragraphs, as well? If so, I'll need you to include it on those sentences.

Just the last sentence in the first paragraph. DepressedPer (talk) 01:03, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

Disregard what I said above; what you said has been cleaned up. DepressedPer (talk) 01:48, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

Marketing —  Done

• I recommend breaking "Singles" and "Promotion" off into their own sections, and making "Tour" a subsection of "Promotion".
• Since the insignia is already prominently displayed on the album artwork, the image in this section can be removed; if necessary, you can mention that the label used while promoting the album is seen on the album cover.
• There is also no source to verify the "get listeners more excited about the track" claim.
• There are several instances where chart positions are not cited in this section.
• February has already passed, so please change the "will be released" to "was released" when talking about "Lover Not a Fighter".
• Can you find a more reputable source than Twitter when talking about the tour?
• The Ent24 reference seems to remove old concert dates after they pass, so you'll need to find another citation to verify the tour dates.

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 04:59, 17 April 2014 (UTC)

Critical response —  Done

• Since the score is 69/100 on Metacritic, I think it's safe to say that the album received generally favorable reviews.
• Again, can you please paraphrase the longer quotes used and break up this large paragraph into smaller ones?

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 17:53, 16 April 2014 (UTC)

Track listing —  Done

• Can you mention that the songwriting/production credits are pulled from the liner notes?
• I don't think that the catalog number needs to be listed here.

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 17:40, 16 April 2014 (UTC)

Release history —  Done

• Can you find individual references to source the releases in Australia, New Zealand, Belgium, United Kingdom, France, and Zimbabwe?
• You may be interested in moving the references into their own column in this table. (This is purely a matter of personal preference, and certainly isn't a make-or-break deal.)

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 18:35, 18 April 2014 (UTC)

Spot-checking —  Done

• Can you find a source other than Twitter for the album artwork?
• The YouTube video doesn't support the "shake shake shake" claim.
• The citation given for UK R&B doesn't list the album in the chart.

Done! DepressedPer (talk) 08:17, 17 April 2014 (UTC)

I'll check in regularly to see how progress is going! WikiRedactor (talk) 17:24, 13 April 2014 (UTC)

I think that the article looks quite nice right now, and I am happy to pass the article. Good work! WikiRedactor (talk) 16:38, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

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