Talk:Denethor/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Willbb234 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Willbb234 (talk · contribs) 20:32, 1 July 2021 (UTC)Reply


I've reviewed a previous article of yours on Middle Earth. I will start this review shortly. Thanks, Willbb234Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 20:32, 1 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 04:44, 2 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • The article could do with a little more in the lede. For example, what specific things do critics note about the character? Also you could include something about the appearance in the Jackson film.
  • Good idea, added.
  • I see in other articles, such as Théoden and Faramir, you give a different subtitle instead of "Character". Do you think "fictional biography" or "literature" could be better?
  • Done.
  • The Tolkien scholar Jane Chance the 'The' seems redundant here.
  • Ah, this is British English usage.
  • which is only perceived in case of Faramir. is this supposed to read which is only perceived in the case of Faramir.?
  • Yes, well spotted.
  • who works against his kingdom's defence you should clarify whether this is deliberate/knowingly done or not.
  • Unintentionally.
  • There are duplicate wikilinks to Saruman and Sauron at the end of the article.
  • Removed.

Rest looks fine and images and sources check out. I would note that you refer to the scholar as 'Jane Chance' in the article but in the sources you say 'Jane Chance Nitzsche' which isn't much of a problem. Let me know if you have any questions. Willbb234Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 16:35, 2 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Many thanks, and I fixed the name. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:52, 2 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the prompt response. Will promote now. Regards, Willbb234Talk (please {{ping}} me in replies) 13:15, 3 July 2021 (UTC)Reply