Talk:Design management/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Racepacket (talk) 02:17, 16 January 2011 (UTC) Please fix disamb links: Brunton and Farr. No bad links.

fixed Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

What is the relationship between this article and Design management in organization? Should the article be listed in a hatnote or a See Also section?

proposed Design management in organization for deletion Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

article Design management in organization deleted on January 23rd Wiki4des (talk) 23:55, 24 January 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Prose is far from clear. Article should be rewritten completely.

   done Wiki4des (talk) 21:01, 22 January 2011 (UTC)

   proposed new article structure: User:Wiki4des Wiki4des (talk) 14:26, 23 January 2011 (UTC)

   Delete "has become a relevant discipline around the world during the last decade. It" in first sentence.

   deleted Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   "from the discovery phase (fuzzy front-end)" - unacceptable parenthetical. How can you equate the two terms?

   deleted Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   "phrased the term" -> "coined the term" or "invented the term"

   done Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   In footnotes, spell out "Design Management Institute" as the publisher instead of abbreviating DMI.

   done Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   Inappropriate use of lists and tables.

   changed Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   Section and subsection headings have inappropriately capitalized words - "Design management in Companies" and "Design Management Hierarchy"

   done Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   Source for quote is http://www.dmi.org/dmi/html/aboutdmi/design_management.htm

   done Wiki4des (talk) 16:08, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   Fn 2 -only has month and year of retrieval. Should give full date of retrievals.

   done Wiki4des (talk) 00:18, 31 January 2011 (UTC)

   Fn 20 - naked url. Use {{cite web}}

   done Wiki4des (talk) 16:08, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   Add publisher to all cites

   done Wiki4des (talk) 00:18, 31 January 2011 (UTC)

   Fn 25 and 26 uses pp which means a range of pages, but only page 32 or 58 was given. Were all of these multiple references all really on the same page?

   done Wiki4des (talk) 16:08, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   Volume parameter should be just the volume number, not volume number a comma and the year.

   done Wiki4des (talk) 16:08, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   Need secondary sources independent of the design management movement and organizations such as Design Management Institute.

   done Wiki4des (talk) 14:26, 23 January 2011 (UTC)

   Block quotes should be integrated into the prose.

   done Wiki4des (talk) 21:01, 22 January 2011 (UTC)

   "applied in the company correlates" should be " applied in a company correlates" avoid improper use of the definite article.

   done Wiki4des (talk) 16:08, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   Lead paragraph needs to summarize the article.

   done Wiki4des (talk) 21:01, 22 January 2011 (UTC)

   " The Design Leadership Fellowship by the University of Oxford is founded." should be " The Design Leadership Fellowship at the University of Oxford is founded."

   done Wiki4des (talk) 16:08, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   enlarged coverage Wiki4des (talk) 14:26, 23 January 2011 (UTC)

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   Article presupposes the value of design management over other approaches.

   done Wiki4des (talk) 21:01, 22 January 2011 (UTC)

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   File:Dm-definition.pdf probably needs an email to OTRS to document who owns the copyright and who is licensing it. Organization vs. individual?

   OTRS pending Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   OTRC permission received (Ticket#2011011610006807) Wiki4des (talk) 08:38, 18 January 2011 (UTC)

   File:Max Liebermann Porträt Peter Behrens.jpg - Max died on February 8, 1935, so the copyright expired in 2005 in some countries, 2035 in others.

   changed image to one without copyright issues Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   The caption for tactical design management photo is too long and wordy.

   shortened Wiki4des (talk) 14:39, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   I am sorry, but this article needs to be completely rewritten and does not meet the criteria. Racepacket (talk) 04:16, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

   thanks, all changes have been made, completing article in next step (see to-do list) for second GA application Wiki4des (talk) 00:18, 31 January 2011 (UTC)