Talk:Design of a Decade: 1986–1996/GA1

Latest comment: 8 months ago by Sammi Brie in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 20:24, 2 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):  
    b (citations to reliable sources):  
    c (OR):  
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):  
    b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

Overall:
Pass/Fail:  

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Some copy tweaks and fresh eyes. Consider clipping all the newspaper items for ease of reading. Ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • tc) 20:59, 2 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

@Dcdiehardfan has done yeoman's work in fixing the blockers with 11JORN busy, so I am passing this page. Still recommended when someone has time: clip the Newspapers.com citations and add alt text. Those aren't GAN blockers, though. Sammi Brie (she/her • tc) 20:17, 13 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

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Lead

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  • The compilation features 14 of Jackson's singles from her three previous albums, Control (1986), Janet Jackson's Rhythm Nation 1814 (1989), and Janet, as well as two new tracks, "Runaway" and "Twenty Foreplay". This needs some different punctuation to handle the nesting order: The compilation features 14 of Jackson's singles from her three previous albums—Control (1986), Janet Jackson's Rhythm Nation 1814 (1989), and Janet—as well as two new tracks, "Runaway" and "Twenty Foreplay".  Y

Background

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  • Jackson's fifth studio album with Virgin, Janet, stylized as janet. and read "Janet, period", was released in May 1993. Consider Jackson's fifth studio album with Virgin, Janet—stylized as janet. and read "Janet, period"—was released in May 1993.  Y
  • The record was a commercial success—opening at number one in the United States, making the singer the first female artist in the Nielsen SoundScan era to do so and second overall—and sold over 14 million copies worldwide.  Y
  • The former is a pop and dance song which draws influences of Middle Eastern music which was originally created... Reword to not have back-to-back "which" clauses.  Y

Release

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  • three of which having distinctly different "have", not "having"  Y

Reception

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  • the new tracks "aptly showcase Jackson's continued evolution as a strong and highly-focused adult performer." Sentence fragment means, even with a sentence-ender, quote before period  Y
  • I made one change because I don't think you'd have caught this. While listed full-run in Newspapers.com under its current title of Tampa Bay Times, it was known as the St. Petersburg Times until 2011. It's good practice to check the paper that you're citing to ensure it published under that name at that time—this isn't always the case. (Another recommendation while I'm here: check page numbers, which for modern papers are rarely straight numbers.)

Singles

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  • "Runaway" reached number three weeks later, and spent 24 weeks inside the Hot 100. This comma is not needed: WP:CINS  Y
  • As it was not released commercially in the United States, "Twenty Foreplay" did not enter the Hot 100, but reached number 36 Add "it" after "but"  Y

Sourcing and spot checks

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Please consider clipping your Newspapers.com citations so they can be accessed without a subscription.

  • 5: It became the first of six top-10 pop singles drawn from the album, which sold more than 7 million copies domestically and 14 million worldwide.  Y
  • 14: Jaeger's review mentions a "momentary Middle Eastern flavor".  Y
  • 27: Quotes all check out from the Cash Box review.  Y
  • 33: RIAA lists Dec. 18, 1995, certification date and double platinum status.  Y
  • 49: BPI lists double platinum certification.  Y
  • 68: Official Chart shows peak at #22.  Y
  • 72: AGF - citation to liner notes.
  • 94: Cannot verify to the supplied link, as Billboard has paywalled this chart. (You may need to link to another source.)
  • 95: 86 ranking verified to RPM.  Y
  • 96: Finished at 55 on Top 200 Albums for 1996.  Y

No real issues looking at Earwig, which flags quotes and some work titles.

Images

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There are two images. One is the album art with NFUR. Another is an image of Oasis playing, which is appropriately licensed. Encouragement: Add alt text.

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