Talk:Devil's Halo/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 20:13, 22 June 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• This is just a personal preference, but instead of using commas, you could use a flatlist with bullet points for the "Genre" and "Producer" parameters; however, it is unnecessary and just for stylistic purposes
• Each genre listed needs to have a source; no unsourced genres in the infobox

Everything in the infobox is based on what's cited in the article (WP:INFOBOXREF) Dan56 (talk) 00:12, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

Lead

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• "The album was released on October 6, 2009, by Downtown Records and charted modestly, but was well received by most critics." --> "The album was released on October 6, 2009, by Downtown Records; it charted modestly and was well received by most music critics."
• Please link "music critics" to the article for "Music journalism"

"Music critics" isn't specified (since it's obvious they would be critics on music), and I think either way this qualifies as an "everyday word understood by most readers in context" (WP:OLINK) Dan56 (talk) 00:14, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

Background

• "Ndegéocello spent over a year writing the songs from Devil's Halo, being inspired in part by her trip to Ireland. "I went to a couple of pubs and there were much older gentlemen playing the guitar and just singing these amazing, simple songs", Ndegéocello recalled." --> "Ndegéocello spent over a year writing the songs from Devil's Halo, being inspired in part by her trip to Ireland: "I went to a couple of pubs and there were much older gentlemen playing the guitar and just singing these amazing, simple songs", Ndegéocello recalled."

I don't think that's appropriate punctuation, at least based on how I've seen it in magazine/newspaper interviews/profiles; the quote is being used in-sentence, in a sentence that's separate from the first, so a period is more appropriate. Dan56 (talk) 00:16, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

Music and lyrics

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• Please remove the link to the article for "fusion (music)"

Done. Dan56 (talk) 00:17, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

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• "For the song "Slaughter", tried to weave together sonic influences from the producers Trevor Horn and RZA, as well as the bands Yes, Sade, and The Human League" --> Reword please; the first part doesn't make sense to me

It was missing "Ndegéocello", as in "For the song 'Slaughter', Ndegéocello tried to..." Dan56 (talk) 00:18, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

Release and reception

• Please add the Metacritic score to the "Professional Ratings" box

That would be overemphasis of one source/point of view, IMO (WP:CRIT#Neutrality and verifiability), as well as redundancy; it's already discussed in detail in the section. Dan56 (talk) 00:20, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

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• "featuring some of Ndegéocello's most strongest compositions yet.[22]" --> "featuring some of Ndegéocello's strongest compositions yet.[22]"
• Please insert a "the" in between "According to Q," and "songs expressing frantic feelings..."

Done and done. Dan56 (talk) 00:20, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

Charts

• Please use the correct chart format per Template:Album chart

I have no idea how to use that template correctly lol. But I did update the table for accessibility ([1]). Dan56 (talk) 00:24, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

References

• "reflist" --> "Reflist|30em"

Done. Dan56 (talk) 00:25, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

End of GA Review:

Great work! An all–in–all well–written article! On hold for seven days to allow for changes. Please @PING me with any questions, comments, or concerns. Thanks and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 20:33, 22 June 2016 (UTC).

Done @Carbrera:, and thanks! Dan56 (talk) 00:25, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

Thanks! I completed the charting format for you, I hope you don't mind. I also passed the article, congrats! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 00:38, 23 June 2016 (UTC).