Talk:Diffuse optical mammography
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Revision Wikipedia:GLAM/PoliMi/2020
editIn general a very detailed article, well done. I just changed some minor spelling issues. Maybe you can have a look on the sentences and sentence length again. For example the very first sentence is very long and nested, therefore difficult to understand. And as it is the preview sentence, readable if your article is linked in other ones, it should be easily understandable, I guess. Also some other are a bit difficult to understand what you want to say. In the end of some sections, no source is mentioned. As you have a lot of references, I am sure, these sentences are part of one of them. I would add them, that you don't get deductions because of that. Again: nice article! --Knosperus (talk) 13:38, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
Observations and suggestions for improvements
editThe following observations and suggestions for improvements were collected, following expert review of the article within the Science, Tecnology, Society and Wikipedia course at the Politecnico di Milano, in June 2020.
The text is well written and almost exhaustive. I have few minor comments and a couple of suggestions
Minor comments: In the first line of the introduction I would replace ""breast composition"" with""breast tissue composition"". Also, for better clarity, consider here to refer to the main components of breast tissue: i.e. ""breast tissue composition (in terms of oxy and deoxy-hemoglobin, water, lipids and collagen). This would help to immediately clearly understand the different information provided by diffuse optical mammography with respect to RX and ultrasound mammography.
Suggestion:
- It would be nice, if possible, to provide a few example of optical mammography device.
- It would be nice, again if possible, a few further examples of optical mammography images. In particular, since the multimodality approach is quoted, it would be nice to provide an example of this multimodal approach and results.
- if there is space enough, it could be interesting to add a final section with the emerging ideas in this research field, as the extension into the SWIR spectral range, the integration with photo-acoustic mammography and Raman spectroscopy (I have quoted some aspects, but probably the author can define the most approapriate between them or quote other emerging ideas)