Talk:Disappearance of Rebecca Coriam/GA1

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Daniel Case in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Mujinga (talk · contribs) 17:59, 18 September 2019 (UTC)Reply


Initial comments

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Lead

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  • I'll do this section last

Life

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  • British Army cadets better to say Army Cadet Force
  • This entire section is only referenced to http://www.rebecca-coriam.com/story-so-far/, which is a primary source. A good article needs to be referenced to reliable secondary or tertiary sources, so unless the standard of referencing improves, this will be an instant fail. It would be ok for me if this source fleshes out some points, but it cannot be used as the sole source for an entire section. I'll carry on because I'm sure there must be secondary sources available here.

Disappearance

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  • Source "The family of missing Chester cruise ship worker Rebecca Coriam made a desperate plea for information at a press conference last week" is dead
  • the day the ship left Los Angeles - the working source says she was on the Vancouver-to-Alaska route, so that's confusing
  • that morning better 21 March 2011
  • http://www.cruisejunkie.com/Overboard.html - 1/ not a reliable secondary source 2/ doesn't seem to give any info, if i keyword search with Wonder/Coriam/Disney there's nothing relevant to the sentence it is supposed to support

Investigations

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  • Mike and Annmaria Coriam - i've only seen Ann or Anne in the refs so far

Quick fail

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  • Unfortunately I'm going to quickfail this article since in both the Life and Disappearance sections the referencing is not based on verifiable reliable sources (point 2 of the six good article criteria). If the situation changes (and I think the article could be made better with a bit of work and a read of the Good article requirements), I would be happy to review again. Mujinga (talk) 20:20, 18 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
@Mujinga: OK, thanks for getting ahead in the queue to review it; I honestly thought I was going to have to wait another five months or something  .

I don't think there's better sourcing available on her life at the moment than her family's account of her life; although you might want to consider that WP:SELFPUB seems to allow it IMO. But ... I did feel this article, which I developed seven years ago, was a bit of a reach for GA to begin with. So now I can move on (I may not be renominating, not for a while, but I will make your recommended improvements; the article can always get better). Daniel Case (talk) 21:23, 18 September 2019 (UTC)Reply