Talk:Do Ya Thang (Rihanna song)/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Till I Go Home (talk · contribs) 04:11, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

I will review the article :) Till I Go Home (talk) 04:11, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

Disambiguation links

• Orange County.

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

Infobox

• No issues.

Lead

• for the deluxe edition of her sixth studio album Talk That Talk -> taken from the deluxe edition of her sixth studio album, Talk That Talk.

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• prominent influences from the '80s -> what influences? Needs to be specified. Also 1980s not 80s.

• Here's what source says: This uplifting pop number with prominent '80s influences from The-Dream. So? How should I be specific? I changed btw to 1980s. — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

Yes but you need to clarify what is influenced from the 1980s, so you would write -> "prominent influences of music from the 1980s".

Added. — Tomica (talk) 10:10, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• The song uses "catchy" drum breaks, synths and "funky" and "subtle" hook. I'm confused, is the hook funky and subtle or just subtle?

• It's both funky and subtle. That's what different reviewers said about its hook. — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• Lyrically, it's a complimentary love track -> "it's" is colloquial, change to "it is".

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

Background and composition

• Nash also co-wrote two more songs on the album: its fourth single "Birthday Cake" and "Red Lipstick which is also featured on the deluxe edition of Talk That Talk (2011). Red Lipstick needs closing quotation mark. Make clear which one is featured on the deluxe version - Birthday Cake or Red Lipstick?

  Copy-edit it + quotation =  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

Ok but you wrote later instead of latter ;) Also place a comma between "Red Lipstick" and "with".

Fully  Done :DD — Tomica (talk) 16:05, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• The song was mixed by Manny Marroquin. Erik Madrid and Chris Galland served as mixing assistants. This can be made into one sentence.

• Merged. — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• "Do Ya Thang" is a R&B song with prominent influences from the '80s that runs for 3 minutes and 44 seconds. Again, same with lead for the 1980s. "Runs for" is colloquial -> change to "has a length of".

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• ...noted that the song sounds as the albums second single -> "albums" should be "album's", because it's a possessive term.

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• love song which contains -> change "which" to "that"

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• Exton further continued that the song is full with vague descriptions of Rihanna's feelings -> this can be worded better.

• Does "explained" reads better? — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

Critical reception

• According to Maz Hallima from Flavour Magazine "Do Ya Thang" has a very "teenager-ish vibe" -> Change "from Flavour Magazine" to "of Flavour Magazine". Also, needs a comma between "Magazine" and "Do".

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• He furhter noted that -> furhter isn't a word

•  Done ...LOL — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• "very sexual persona" sounds POV'ish.

• Quoted it directly from the source and replaced with "hypersexual persona", as it says. — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• A reviewer of Sputnikmusic -> a reviewer from Sputnikmusic

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• Michael Jepson of The Fourth State concluded that "Do Ya Thang" together with "Cockiness (Love It)" and "Roc Me Out" -> comma between "Thang" and "together" and after "Roc Me Out"

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• According to Jepson, all of them are "blatantly raunchy" and feel like a follow up to Rihanna's 2011 single "S&M" (Loud, 2011) -> how does this pertain to the song in question?

• Well, he compares the song, together with other tracks from the album with S&M. I mean its important as of its sexual themes. — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

That's ok, but I would change "all of them" to "all three songs".

Re-worded.— Tomica (talk) 16:05, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

• According to her the track is... -> comma between "her" and "the"

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

Track listing

• No issues.

Credits and personnel

• No issue.

Charts

• in the chart issue -> I think you mean for the chart issue?

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 09:04, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• Passing the article :) — Till I Go Home (talk) 03:46, 5 April 2012 (UTC)