Talk:Dralístico/GA2
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Reviewer: Ceranthor (talk · contribs) 17:17, 6 March 2019 (UTC)
Will review this (for the WikiCup). ceranthor 17:17, 6 March 2019 (UTC)
- Hoping to get this in the next day or so. ceranthor 13:21, 12 March 2019 (UTC)
Prose
edit- Lead
- "Carlos Muñoz, better known as Místico, is a Mexican second-generation" - "second-generation" meaning what here?
- That his father was also a professional wrestler. MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- "(a "Face", someone who portrays the good guys in wrestling)" - perhaps written in an informal tone; also I think it's best to avoid idioms like "good guys"
- Better?? MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- "He is a former two times" - should be two-time
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- " His older brother" - seems like you mean Mistico, but you should clarify that you mean Mistico's brother and not his father's brother
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- "He has also wrestled both in Japan and Europe through CMLL's partnerships with other promotions as well as on the Mexican independent circuit." - with other promotions... such as? Don't need "also" *and* "both" - that's redundant
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Professional wrestling career
- "uncles Franco Columbo, Pit bull I, and Pit bull II" - both Pit bulls are his uncles?
- "Lee wrestled mainly in six-man tag team matches with and against his stablemates,[9][10]" - stablemates? Don't know what that means
- Other people of the stable (group) that he was a member of. MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- "before being put in his first major program the following April," - too passive. What about "entering" instead? And then tweaking the rest of the sentence to reflect that
- Fixed I think MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- "who went on to win the tournament.[16][17]" - why not just say "who won the tournament" and cut out "went on"
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- "qualified for the 2017 Universal Championship tournament.In the first round " - missing a space :)
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- " Místico was paired up with Negro Casas" - I think just "paired" is fine, no need for the "up"
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Personal life
- "His younger brother made his debut in November 2013 as the second Dragon Lee.[93][94] " - which "His" are you referring to here?
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- "Pit Bull I and Pit Bull II," - earlier you didn't capitalize these; be consistent throughout the article
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
References
edit- Refs should generally occur in increasing order, ie. [1][2][3] rather than [1][3][2]
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Ref 2's title translation has a typo: ""Fantastica Mania" participants annonced!"
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- What makes Wrestleview a reliable source?
- Wikipedia:WikiProject Professional wrestling/Sources#Industry specific - Lists it as reliable. MPJ-DK (talk) 22:32, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Ref 18's title translation also has a typo: "Quick results from Arena Mexico: "In Search of an Idol" is a new relality show from CMLL and Cadena 3]. "
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Ref 21's translation has a space typo: "Mistico with the soul of the Dragon... The amazons of the ring in thecage]."
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Ref 29's translation has a typo: "[Successful return f Místico in Arena Mexico]."
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Ref 44 has a typo: " [Místico and Avernp for the National Welterweight Championship"
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Ref 77: "Results from the Finals of the incredible pairs tournament: Místico and Mephisto defeats paradise" - shouldn't it be "defeat" not "defeats"?
- Fixed MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- What makes Ovaciones a reliable source?
- A daily Mexican newspaper with an editorial staff etc. MPJ-DK (talk) 22:32, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- What makes CageMatch a reliable source?
- Wikipedia:WikiProject Professional wrestling/Sources#Industry specific - Lists it as reliable as long as ""Strictly used for match results and not other information." which is what it is used for here MPJ-DK (talk) 22:32, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- What makes The Internet Wrestling Database a reliable source?
- Wikipedia:WikiProject Professional wrestling/Sources#Limited reliable sources with the note "Use with caution, mainly for uncontroversial claims", here it is an online source that reflects what the print source is saying. MPJ-DK (talk) 22:32, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Earwig's tool checks out.
Images
edit- File:CMLL November 30 Mistico posing.jpg - checks out
- File:Mistico-2013.jpg - seems to check out
- File:Místico II 2017.jpg - checks out
- File:Carisico and Mistico.jpg - checks out; pushing the title for the other promotions section
- Looks okay to me, what browser are you using? It will not be a problem as soon as this section gets longer with future accomplishments. MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- File:CMLL November 30 Mistico dive on Euforia.jpg - checks out; however, formatting-wise it looks like it's encroaching into the next section
- It does brige the next section, not sure if its better to use a "clear" template with a text gap or leave it as is. MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- File:Mistico-Volador-Sombra.jpg - seems to check out
Thanks for your patience. ceranthor 13:07, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review, I will provide answers for reliability in a moment. MPJ-DK (talk) 22:26, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- @MPJ-DK: Sorry yet again for the delay. Reading thru today and hoping to pass this by the end of the day. Will post any more pressing comments if I see anything that needs fixing. ceranthor 12:43, 21 March 2019 (UTC)