Talk:Drowned World Tour 2001 (video)/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by SNUGGUMS in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 14:54, 13 October 2014 (UTC)Reply


Here is how the article currently compares against the GA criteria:

  • Is it well-written?: Mostly. I've done some tweaking, and have the following comments:
  • For the infobox, use "1:45:00" or "1 hour and 45 minutes" rather than "105 minutes"
    • Sure.
  • Rather than what type of camera was used, I'd include in the lead details on sales.
    • But don't you think that would devoid from WP:LEAD because then there won't be anything about the technicality and just commercial reception. And I don't want to give WP:UNDUE weightage to US release when it was worldwide.
  • In "Background", it would be helpful to mention Rocco by name when mentioning Madonna giving birth.
    • Sorry missed it.
  • A referral link to Drowned World Tour wouldn't hurt
    • Used the {{main}} template
  • I'm not sure it's really necessary to include the detail regarding Canada. Probably better to just say "United States" rather than "North America".
    • Shortened that it skipped Canada.
  • In "Development", the comma after "a video titled Drowned World Tour 2001" is misplaced and should instead go after GHV2
    • Great!
  • In "Synopsis", the section titles shouldn't have italics
    • Actually Carol Clerk's book used it with italics, so I did. But no matter, I removed them.
  • "then husband" should be hyphenated in "dedicated it to her then husband"
    • Tweaked it more, full name was mentioned previously.
  • In "Critical reception, "The reviewer" should be mentioned by name, which is Colin Jacobson
  • "AOL TV Viewer Awards" isn't exactly a prominent award, not sure it's really worth mentioning
  • Is it verifiable?: There was one questionable reference I removed myself. Some content has issues, though:
  • FN8 (MTV News) mentions nothing about "The End" appearing towards the show's finale
    • Removed.
  • FN9 (musicOMH) is dead
  • FN10 (Slant Magazine) links to a general music page, not a review
  • FN28 (BBC News) mentions nothing about Evita or any interlude
  • FN30 should be listed as Orlando Sentinel, not Orange County Register
  • FN38 (Recording Industry Association of America) mentions certifications, but says nothing about copies sold
  • FN39 (Yahoo! Music) does not mention anything about this album's sales
  • FN42 (IFPI Denmark) lists "Madonna: Live in Detroit" at #5, but not Drowned World Tour
  • FN45 (British Phonographic Industry) also lists certification, but does not explicitly mention copies sold
    • See above. Not needed.
  • FN48 (Syndicat National de l'Édition Phonographique) gives "Error 471"
    • This I can comment out, but I won't delete. SNEP is refurbishing their website as it says and the link might crop up in the future.
  • Is it broad in coverage?: Almost. Aside from focus details mentioned above, my only concern is the AllMusic review as it only gives a star-rating without commentary. Better to replace this with a link giving commentary.
  • AllMusic usually does not give detailed review for videos, it does it only for albums and select songs. For videos and any other releases, like box sets etc, it just gives a star rating.
  • Is it neutral?: Yes.
  • Is it stable?: Yes.
  • Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?: Yes.

The article needs work, but I don't think the problems are too extensive. This nomination is on hold for seven days. Get to it!

@SNUGGUMS: I think I addressed all of them. —Indian:BIO [ ChitChat ] 06:10, 16 October 2014 (UTC)Reply
Now passing :) Snuggums (talk / edits) 07:37, 16 October 2014 (UTC)Reply