Talk:Dupleix-class cruiser/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Peacemaker67 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 08:16, 19 May 2020 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. A few comments:
- Lead
- suggest "The Dupleix-class consisted of three armoured cruisers"
- suggest "the ships of the class were smaller and less powerfully armed" and move the link to sister ship to the the second para
- "Desaix and Kléber exchanged assignments in 1907
later" - Ottoman Empire is duplinked
- "but in July she struck a naval mine laid by a German submarine and sank" (but the body says June?)
'Body
- comma after "to the Navy Minister"
- "the traditionalists
whowanted cruisers" - suggest "modernists who
believed insought armored cruisers" - link Armand Besnard
- "and that
itthe ships needed more endurance" - the displacement in the body and infobox don't match
- I don't suppose you can link short tons?
- conning tower armor in the infobox "9,100–120 mm"
- intro 3rd DL before using the abbreviation
That's all I could find. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:24, 20 May 2020 (UTC)
- Ottoman Syria is duplinked
- Thanks for catching these. I don't really see a need for a link to short tons; links in the literature are only between metric and long tons.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:36, 20 May 2020 (UTC)
- No worries, fair enough. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by an acceptably licensed image with an appropriate caption. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:49, 21 May 2020 (UTC)