Talk:Dylan Kwasniewski/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:47, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

Looks like an Interesting fellow we have here. Will be posting comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 15:47, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Racing career

• "and would make the move to NASCAR the following year." - reword to and made the move to NASCAR the following year.

Touring series

• "In 2011, Kwasniewski entered the K&N Pro Series West series driving for Gene Price Motorsports" - comma is needed between "series" & "driving"
• "along with nine top tens" - top-tens
• "Kwasniewski subsequently was named Sunoco Rookie of the Year." - The sponsor is redundant.
• "along with recording 15 top tens." - same problem with the second point in this sub-section
• "Kwasniewski led teammate and 2011 series champ" - informal, should be changed to champion
• "beat Pursley for the title by six points, and at 17 years, 5 months and 10 days," - split off the sentence so it reads as follows beat Pursley for the title by six points. At 17 years, 5 months and 10 days,

Xfinity Series

• "On February 3, 2014, Turner Scott Motorsports announced that Kwasniewski will enter the Nationwide Series for the 2014 season driving the team's No. 31 Rockstar Chevrolet." - I'd change "will to would given 2014 has passed. You shoould add a comma between "season" and "driving" and put the acronyms of Turner Scott Motorsports in parentheses
• "Kwasniewski was the fastest during the second day of Nationwide testing at Daytona International Speedway," - Perhaps you could change the text in bold letters to either was the fastest driver or was fastest
• "and later entered the ARCA Racing Series' Lucas Oil 200 with TSM, and won the pole position." - winning the pole position.
• "Kwasniewski ended 2014 with three top-10s" - top-tens
• ", and with Brennan Poole joining the team, his future with the team became uncertain" - reptition of team

References

• Refs 3, 10 and 13 should have Associated Press in the agency field and not the author one.
• Reference 23 needs Associated Press in the agency field

This looks to be of good quality Ben. On hold until all of the points raised above have been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 17:33, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

@MWright96: Done all. Thanks again, --Bcschneider53 (talk) 18:25, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

@Bcschneider53: Okay. Now this article can become a Good Article. MWright96 (talk) 18:56, 18 January 2018 (UTC)