Talk:Dystopia (Iced Earth album)

GA Review

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 12:52, 4 December 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Too much quotefarming

   "Songs" section too messy; try to merge it somehow, like in "Reviews" section

   The article is generally messy arranged; "Writing and recording" doesn't belong to "Background", same for "World Dystopia Tour" and "Reviews" (should be lone two-header sections), "Track listing" should be put somewhere above "Personnel"

   "Sales and chart positions" is too small; integrate it somewhere, how about into the small section "Release"?

   odd usage of hyphens, eg "Iced Earth -vocalist" (hyphen should be removed) or "Wacken -festival" (same); Hyphens should be used when you want to separate eg prefixes and sufixes (for example anti-communism) or if you want to join something, eg Compound modifiers (for example well-prepared student). However, the hyphen is often omitted

   Apart the wrong hyphen usage, the article contains several prose issues, mostly in grammar. Examples:

   "Two of the albums songs ("Dystopia" and "Tragedy and Triumph") also feature the return of the "Something Wicked" -storyline and the bands mascot Set Abominae previously featured on previous albums" - redundant repetition

   "it's the band's first album with vocalist Stu Block, who joined after former vocalist Matt Barlow left the band for a second time on August 6, 2011" - same

   "During its first week the album sold over 6,000 copies in the United States and charted in many countries" - how many is many?

   "According to Jon Schaffer and Stu Block, writing the lyrics was basically the two of them drinking beer and watching movies." - avoid noun + ing, and the last clause should be rewritten.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   How reliable are the following sites:

   imperumi.net

   hallowed.se

   cmdistro.com

   metal-army.com

   about.com

   bravewords.com

   themetalcritic.com

   kaaoszine.fi

   discogs.com is not reliable because it is user-generated

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   rationale for File:IcedEarth2011.jpg indicates [1] as a source, although I could not find this picture anywhere on its homepage.

   no need to italicize the album in references.

7. Overall: there are too many issues, not only in references, but in prose. This should be copyedited and peer reviewed before nominating in future.

   Pass/Fail:

• Dabsolver check: Fixed three dab links
• Checklinks check: one dead
• Reflinks check: ok
• Fixed dashes

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Dystopia (Iced Earth album)/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 05:03, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:03, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• I'm not convinced that the nonfree image File:IcedEarth5Songs.jpg is necessary in this article; one album cover suffices. That image has to be shrunk down anyway; too big as is.
• "joined after former vocalist Matt Barlow left the band on August 6, 2011." not sure the date's necessary in the lead.
• "in five "making of" episodes, released between September 16 and October 21" released where?
• I feel that the lead is overreferenced. There are a few refs that I understand have to stay there, but others (on August 6, 2011.[2], Recording, with co-producer Jim Morris.[4]) can be removed since they are referenced later in the article.
• A few references still need publishers, namely the studio report one and the couple Youtube ones (I'm usually leery of Youtube as an RS, but in this context it makes sense so it's fine)
• This is probably a silly question, but why are some making of videos referenced to the main Iced Earth site and others to YouTube?

Some of these issues I'd prefer to be resolved before I continue, even though I've only done a lead and reference check so far. I'm halting my review here for now so this can be addressed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

The aforementioned issues have now been dealt with. --SilverBullitt (talk) 10:27, 19 June 2012 (UTC)

Here's the rest of my issues:

• "go about writing the film-based lyrics, was by " no comma needed here.
• "On July 13, 2011, it was announced that the band were currently master tracking the album in Florida." feels dated as written. Rewrite, something like "The band began master tracking the album on July 13" or something along those lines.
• "material[19], from" refs after punctuation
• "on a promotional EP, that came" no comma needed

Only minor stuff left; I'll put the article on hold and pass when fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:19, 20 June 2012 (UTC)

The remaining issues have now been fixed.--SilverBullitt (talk) 09:55, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

Everything checks out now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 14:42, 21 June 2012 (UTC)