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Reviewer: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 21:33, 29 March 2014 (UTC)
Let's see if third time is the charm. -- Zanimum (talk) 21:33, 29 March 2014 (UTC)
- I hope it is :) XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 21:53, 29 March 2014 (UTC)
I've made a very slight run-on sentence in "Background and release". Passing it and "Composition", including the sample OGG. Passing images, both fair use and free. -- Zanimum (talk) 21:00, 30 March 2014 (UTC)
- I noticed that, and thank you very much sir! XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 21:06, 30 March 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks for catching that! Giacobbe talk 21:10, 30 March 2014 (UTC)
Background and production
- Shortened French radio info, it was mostly irrelevant to readers. What Katy says is more important than where she said it.
- The quote at the end of the section is over dotted, three dots per occurence only, please.
Synopsis
- felids is an unfamiliar term: why say that, as opposed to cats?
- Wikipedia links cats as an actual household cat, felids are the actual family of larger cats (the ones shown in the video) Giacobbe talk 20:23, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
- Maybe it's best to just to simply say "large cats" and not link it. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 20:27, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
- Or [[felids|big cats]]? Large felines is fine, but it's a tricky thing what to say here. -- Zanimum (talk) 00:55, 9 April 2014 (UTC)
- Wikipedia links cats as an actual household cat, felids are the actual family of larger cats (the ones shown in the video) Giacobbe talk 20:23, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
- "She comes across a broken robot (resembling a spaceman), which upon her kiss turns into a" --> "She comes across a broken robot, resembling a spaceman; upon her kiss it turns into a"
- why is Pigeon capitalized? gazelle isn't. Only Latin names of animals are generally's capitalized, or English names of animals that have human names mixed in.
- Vogue sunglasses... is that a brand, a style?
- Vogue is a brand, though no Wiki page exists for it. Giacobbe talk 20:26, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
- Done Giacobbe talk 20:36, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
- I recognize the logo, now that I Googled it. Interesting side note, Vogue Eyewear is owned by Luxottica, which owns Ray-Ban, Oakley, makes for Prada, Chanel, Armani... and then they own practically every eyewear chain: Bright Eyes, LensCrafters, Pearle Vision, Sears Optical, Sunglass Hut... good grief! -- Zanimum (talk) 00:53, 9 April 2014 (UTC)
- Done Giacobbe talk 20:36, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
- Vogue is a brand, though no Wiki page exists for it. Giacobbe talk 20:26, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
Reception
- Does Sal Cinquemani have other criticism of the video? The quote you've included seems rather docile.
Live performances and cover versions
- What's a Walmart Soundcheck set? I haven't the foggiest. Is it online, is it at a store, is it a concert at Walmart head office?
- Removed since it's hard to say exactly what those are. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 20:39, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
- Googling this, it's easier to describe than you thought. Don't over think things, sometimes the answer is closer than you'd think. -- Zanimum (talk) 00:53, 9 April 2014 (UTC)
- Hold on, this was actually a downloadable track? (Just looking at the article/redirect for Walmart Soundcheck, re: Big and Rich's appearance. https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Walmart_Soundcheck&oldid=567880886 ) -- Zanimum (talk) 00:57, 9 April 2014 (UTC)
- The tour should be mentioned first, even if these one-offs were earlier. It seems like an afterthought where it currently is placed.
- How is it now? XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 20:39, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
- Looks good. While this format isn't chronological, it's most important first. -- Zanimum (talk) 00:53, 9 April 2014 (UTC)
Passing "Track listings and formats", "Credits and personnel", "Charts", "Certifications", "Release history", "See also", "External links". -- Zanimum (talk) 19:57, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
Passing "Critical reception", "Commercial performance". References left, plus reviewing your changes. -- Zanimum (talk) 18:59, 8 April 2014 (UTC)
There is variance between references to Billboard. Sometimes it's "Billboard. Prometheus Global Media." and sometimes "Billboard (New York: Prometheus Global Media)." Are they even two different templates, perhaps? cite news and cite web?
None of the sources seems out of line to cite.
There are a few problem links. -- Zanimum (talk) 00:38, 9 April 2014 (UTC)
- While cite web and cite news are somewhat different templates, I've made them all match now. Also removed dead links. Zanimum any last suggestions? XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 01:21, 9 April 2014 (UTC)
- I think everything checks out now. GA! -- Zanimum (talk) 01:30, 9 April 2014 (UTC)