Talk:Early history of Gowa and Talloq/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Mike Christie in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 18:56, 1 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 18:56, 1 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

The article is easily GA quality, and I'll go ahead and pass it. It would probably pass FAC without too much trouble, if you're interested in taking it there. I have a few points noted below, but these are not issues for a GA assessment. A fascinating article, professionally written, and a very interesting read.

  • The article uses {{harvid}}, but Ricklefs 2001 is not used, so it's generating an error. I've removed the ref for now.
  • The lead has citations; this is not necessary, so I just wanted to make sure you're aware these can be removed. Many editors think the lead looks cleaner without the citations, and since information in the body is repeated in the body and cited there, there's no general requirement for cites in the lead.
  • The establishment of Gowa was part of a radical restructuring of South Sulawesi society by which wet rice cultivation intensified rapidly. Likewise, early Gowa was a largely agrarian polity with no direct access to the coastline: I don't follow the "likewise"; what is the connection between these two points?
  • The map in the first body section is very helpful, but would it be possible to get an inset for it showing the position of the Gowa and Talloq within the South Sulawesi peninsula?
  • Not all captions need citations, but in the cases where information is given which is not cited in the text a citation is necessary. That's true at least for the photograph showing the Salakoa, and perhaps for a couple of the others.
  • Older historiography has generally taken the view: can we put some date boundaries to this?

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 01:07, 2 January 2018 (UTC)Reply