Talk:Earwig/GA2

Well-written:

• Rather than saying 'Dermaptera, commonly called earwigs,' say 'Earwigs, which make up the order Dermapters', or something similar because the title should be the first word. Perhaps include the misconception in a later sentence and provide a brief description in the first sentence.

 DoneBugboy52.4 | =-= 01:27, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →Earwigs can fly, but rarely do so.

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:12, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Don't start a sentence with But; either combine with another or replace the word.

 Done:Didn't see any sentences that started with but. Bugboy52.4 | =-= 01:30, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →care of their eggs and will continue to watch over offspring until their second molt as nymphs.

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 01:57, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →As the nymphs molt, sexual dimorphism such as differences in pincer shapes begins to show.

 Done I, used, too, many, commas :) — The Earwig @ 05:16, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →the Late Triassic

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:16, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →and pteron, wing.

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:21, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →The common term

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:21, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Though, earwigs are omnivores that are predisposed to hiding in warm humid crevices and as such do occasionally crawl into the human ear canal.→Earwigs are predisposed to hiding in warm humid crevices and do indeed occasionally crawl into the human ear canal.

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:21, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →(to fit inside tight crevices)

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:26, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Though the Saint Helena earwig reaches 80 mm long" is not a complete sentence.

 Done: reworded, tell me how I did. Bugboy52.4 | =-= 01:36, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →free-fall

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:26, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →The only insect predators

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:26, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Reword "meaning they develop in a series of molts, they undergo 4 to 6 instars, or molts."

 Done: reworded, tell me how I did. Bugboy52.4 | =-= 01:34, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• "Females will start mating in the fall around September, the beginning of the mating season" is repetitive

Where does it repeat? Bugboy52.4 | =-= 01:44, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

I suggest, "Females will start mating in the fall around September"; "the beginning of the mating season" is redundant. This fact is already implied by "Females will start mating". — The Earwig @ 05:31, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

 Done — The Earwig @ 19:59, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• may retain in the female→remain?

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 01:45, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →January to early March

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:31, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →Afterward the female

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:31, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →studies by entomologists

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:31, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Reword The mother will also vigorously defend the eggs from predators, not eating unless an egg goes bad, she will also continuously lick and clean the egg to protect it from fungus.

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 01:49, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• "The urge to persist will for days until the eggs, as seen in the studies, are removed..." I don't know what you're trying to say here.

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 13:00, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

The urge to clean the eggs will what for days? Read it word by word. "would continue the urge" also doesn't make sense.

• "The nymphs would have feed off their own mother's saliva and regurgitated vegetation, and also on their own molts." is also confusing.

Does that clarify? Bugboy52.4 | =-= 13:03, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

No. "would have feed"? Read it word by word.

Done that, working on the whole section now. A little insignificant ^{Giving thanks to all that is me} 18:23, 30 November 2009 (UTC)

• "the wings will also start to develop, if the wings are present, the forewings are short and thick like elytra or shell over the wins on beetles, covering the hindwings." Grammar. Why wouldn't they be present?

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 13:07, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

You have two separate thoughts here: starting to develop and being present. First, you need to know when to use a semicolon. Second,

Done when I rewrote the statement above. A little insignificant ^{Giving thanks to all that is me} 12:52, 2 December 2009 (UTC)

• →especially throughout

 Done — The Earwig @ 19:59, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →and now occur throughout

 Done — The Earwig @ 19:59, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• found far north→found in the north

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 13:08, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• here?

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 13:27, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• rewrite 'northern states of USA'

 Done — The Earwig @ 05:09, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• "Out of about 1,800 species, only about 25 occur in North America, 45 in Europe (including the 7 in Britain), and 60 in Australia." So are all 1700 others in Asia? Also strike the 7.

The source didn't stat of the other species, but I dought that all the other species are only found in Asia. Bugboy52.4 | =-= 17:43, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• →years ago and comprises. Tell where elsewhere

Where else should it go? Bugboy52.4 | =-= 00:25, 2 December 2009 (UTC)

I guess it's okay.

• Reword "Some of the traits believed by neontologists to be only of earwigs are not so for the earliest fossils, but adults had five-segmented tarsi (the final segment of the leg), well developed ovipositors, veined tegmina (forewings) and long segmented cerci, in fact the pincers would have not been curled and used as they are now."

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 00:25, 2 December 2009 (UTC)

• Link Permian, debold Grylloblattaria, and join that sentence with the next (Though... is not a complete sentence).

 Done. ZooFari 03:28, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Don't keep linking tarsi and cerci.

 Done ZooFari 03:34, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Find a bluelink for antennal heart or remove it.

 Done - delinked. ZooFari 03:38, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• What is an Ampulla?

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 13:20, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• the two suborders Arixeniina and Hemimerina what? (the 1950s)

 Done Clarified the text. Is it okay now? AshLin (talk) 20:08, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• What's with all the bold in the taxonomy section?

 Done AshLin (talk) 20:08, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Leaves and petals are not crops.

 Done ZooFari 03:18, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Cupule?

 Fixed cupule -> cup. ZooFari 03:56, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• Why are there two different dates for Arixeniina in the charactertistics section?

 Done Clarified the text. Please see if its okay now. AshLin (talk) 20:08, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

Factually accurate and verifiable:

• Capitalize Western Journal of Medicine

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 04:03, 2 December 2009 (UTC)

Broad in its coverage:

• Nothing else for the physical description? Perhaps more about their namesake wings?

 Done Is that good enough. Bugboy52.4 | =-= 17:14, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

• How long after being laid do the eggs hatch? If the life cycle is a year, when do they die?

It says they live for a year. Bugboy52.4 | =-= 17:23, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

If the eggs are laid in late January to early March, when do they hatch?

 Done Bugboy52.4 | =-= 04:03, 2 December 2009 (UTC)

Neutral: Yes

Stable: Yes

Images:

• Consider File:Forficula auricularia.jpg or other 1000 words at commons:Category:Dermaptera

 Done. Added two images. Relocated another appropriately. AshLin (talk) 20:13, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

Finally, change the ext links to be a name of a page, followed by the name of the site. "Earwigs eat through your brain" urban legend debunked → Bugs in the Ear urban legend from Snopes. Fantastic job!! Everything is well-referenced from academic sources and it has nearly everything I need to know.Reywas92^Talk 01:07, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

Sorry if I'm unclear. If there's an arrow, it means to change the similar text in the article to what I've suggested above. "Here" is not a specific word and should be change to "there". The sentence ending with "the two suborders Arixeniina and Hemimerina" is very unclear, and add "the" before "1950s". Reywas92^Talk 03:18, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

Red Links

Hi,

While it is not said so explicitly in WP:WIAGA, GAs should not have red links.

The MOS says :-

"To make a link more useful to readers when no article currently exists, it may be useful to create a redirect to a relevant existing article or section, or to create a stub for the new article (check similar articles for conventions on naming and categorization)."

So the Earwig editors are requested to please convert the red links to stubs, I'm clueless as far as Dermaptera are concerned.

AshLin (talk) 13:44, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

Strange, red links are allowed in FA ! Shyamal (talk) 15:38, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

Is that so! While reviewing, I used to ask editors to convert. The point was never contested. IMHO even if this is not a FA/GA requirement, this should be done. Red links give the impression that the articles are incomplete in some way. Let the stubs exist instead. AshLin (talk) 17:07, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

I believe if their is a red link the editor should be required to explain briefly, but not required to make a new page. Bugboy52.4 | =-= 17:17, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

Which links, specifically? If you want to create nice little articles that's fine, but I'm vehemently opposed to the creation of crappy, redundant substubs just for the sake of having them. Reywas92^Talk 18:59, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

Created a page on Doru aculeatum. Protelytroptera is beyond me. AshLin (talk) 19:07, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

There should be no red links anymore :) ZooFari 19:44, 28 November 2009 (UTC)

Thanks, those are very nice start articles. Reywas92^Talk 03:21, 29 November 2009 (UTC)

Further: Specific taxonomic disputes are not important enough for the lead. Reywas92^Talk 03:21, 29 November 2009 (UTC)

Great job! I hope to see more of this! Reywas92^Talk 23:12, 2 December 2009 (UTC)