Talk:Eastern Air Lines Flight 663/GA1
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Dough4872 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: ---Dough4872 16:48, 25 December 2009 (UTC)
Comments:
- "a nine-year veteran of Eastern", "Eastern" sounds colliqual here.
- "Though the control tower responded that Flight 663 was at a higher altitude than Flight 212, it was, in fact, lower." should be combined with the following paragraph.
- The Aftermath and investigation contains many short paragraphs that should be combined.
- "The Navy" sounds colliqual.
- The sentence "An additional thirteen Coast Guard vessels searched the shores of Long Island salvage efforts." sounds awkward.
- Are there any pictures that can be added to the article?
I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough4872 16:48, 25 December 2009 (UTC)
- "a nine-year veteran of Eastern", "Eastern" sounds colliqual here.
- Done changed to "Eastern Airlines".
- "The Navy" sounds colliqual.
- Done changed to "United States Navy".
- Though the control tower responded that Flight 663 was at a higher altitude than Flight 212, it was, in fact, lower." should be combined with the following paragraph.
- The Aftermath and investigation contains many short paragraphs that should be combined.
- The sentence "An additional thirteen Coast Guard vessels searched the shores of Long Island salvage efforts." sounds awkward.
- All Done did some rewording, and reorganized the paragraphs.
- Are there any pictures that can be added to the article?
- Not done Only copyrighted image of the plane found - will do later if permissible. Blodance the Seeker 09:45, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
- I've added a pic of DC-7 into the article. Apart from this, I really don't know what else pics can be inserted into it. Any suggestions? Blodance the Seeker 16:33, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
- The article looks good now, so I will pass it. ---Dough4872 16:37, 26 January 2010 (UTC)
- I've added a pic of DC-7 into the article. Apart from this, I really don't know what else pics can be inserted into it. Any suggestions? Blodance the Seeker 16:33, 26 January 2010 (UTC)