Talk:Eddy (Ed, Edd n Eddy)/GA1

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 23:45, 14 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

  • Lede: premiered on January 4, 1999 → premiered on January 4, 1999 in the United States
  • Lede: Link Ed
  • Lede: 3rd Paragraph - Italic on Ed, Edd, and Eddy
  • Role: Eddy is one of three Eds → Eddy is one of the three Eds

On hold. TBrandley • talk • contributions 23:45, 14 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

Hi, TBrandley! Thanks for the review. I have addressed the current issues. Are there any more? :) All the Best, --Khanassassin 11:30, 15 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
I'd like to jump in here. This is a rather good article, but I spotted a few issues:
  • Are there any cites for the "Role in Ed, Edd n Eddy" section and the first paragraph of "Personality"? Maybe you could use episode specific citations, kind of like what's done here under "Character Arc".
  • "...order to purchase their favourite favorite confectionery; jawbreakers...." Kill repeated word
  • "Though he comes up with the scams by himself, he does not participate in the construction, meaning Edd and Ed must build by themselves, though Ed often accidentally destroys it." -> "Though he comes up with the scams by himself, he does not participate in the construction, meaning Edd and Ed must build by themselves, though Ed often accidentally destroys them."
That's all I have. Good job.--Gen. Quon (talk) 16:10, 15 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Hi, Quon! I've taken care of the second and third issue you stated - However, really, if I'd cite episode speficic sources, I'd cite the whole series! He basically comes up with scams, is selfish, brags about his looks etc. in nearly every episode... There's no specific episode that reveals how selfish he is, how he always tries to get jawbreakers etc. etc. :) All the Best, --Khanassassin 19:29, 15 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
Great work! I've promoted. TBrandley • talk • contributions 22:22, 15 June 2012 (UTC)Reply