Talk:Edea Kramer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 20:47, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

I will review this within the next few days.--Alexandra IDV^talk 20:47, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

Appearances

• Edea first appears in the PlayStation video game Final Fantasy VIII. - I would probably suggest being a little more specific and calling it a PlayStation role-playing video game.
• This section uses some FF-specific terms without defining them first: What or who are Galbadia, SeeD, Squall? Rinoa appears to be a person, what does it mean when it says that they are "taken over"? I assume it's mind control again, but it's not clear.

Reception

• Her outfit was praised by website staffs - it is clear that it's the websites' staff who wrote this, so I would probably just straight-up say it was praised by "publications including [A, B]"
• I'm unsure about the "particularly her breasts" bit, and would probably prefer to just describe her as attractive.

There weren't too many problems here! I'll put this on hold for now~!--Alexandra IDV^talk 22:10, 14 November 2019 (UTC)

Fixed all, I reckon. - Bryn (talk) (contributions) 22:29, 14 November 2019 (UTC)

Looking good! I will pass this~!--Alexandra IDV^talk 23:07, 14 November 2019 (UTC)