Talk:Edgar Williams

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B class review

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B class easily. Some minor edits were made. I have a question about this clause, "oldest son of (Joseph) Edgar Williams, a clergy, and his wife". Shouldn't this be "clergyman"? Or is this one of those rare differences between English-English and American-English? When I see the word "clergy" I usually understand it to mean "the body of all clergypersons". Djmaschek (talk) 03:52, 1 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

Changed to "clergyman". Just an error on my part. I was about to say what sort of clergyman he was, but there's no Wikipedia article on it, and I left it in mid-sentence. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 04:17, 1 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Edgar Williams/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 20:29, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply


Initial review comment

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I plan to GA review this article. Djmaschek (talk) 20:29, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Review 1

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For B class reviews, I usually fix typos and other minor errors. For GA reviews, the nominator gets to fix all errors, however trivial. If you disagree, please argue your case. Djmaschek (talk) 21:29, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

  •   Done (1) Well-written, (2) Verifiable, (3) Broad coverage, (4) Neutral, (5) Stable, (6) Illustrated.
  • In my opinion, the two-sentence introduction is too brief for a GA class article. For example, there is no mention of (1) the fact that he was one of the very few persons who were privy to the Ultra secret, or (2) his work with Rhodes scholars (Rhodes House means nothing to me, nor to most Americans, I'm guessing), or (3) that he was retained by Montgomery as an intel officer.
     Y Added bits about this. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:33, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • Early life, paragraph 1: "where here played soccer" (he).
     Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:33, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • North Africa, paragraph 1: "sent to the Cyrenaica" (the? I've never seen it referred to as "the Cyrenaica".)
     Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:33, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • North Africa, paragraph 2: "The appointment of de Guingand, an officer with no experience in intelligence, said much about the state..." The sentence sounds as if it is entirely about de Guingand. I wonder if you really mean: "The appointment of Williams by de Guingand".
     Y Re-worked to make my point more clearly.
  • Just curious: who was the DMI fired for not correctly forecasting? (This does not need to be included.)
    Brigadier Eric James "John" Shearer. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:33, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • North Africa, paragraph 4: Use of the word "cossetted". My memory of reading about the desert war comes up with the word "corsetted" instead. Can you double check?
     Y Ooops! Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:33, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • North Africa, paragraph 4: "Williams suggested that the two could be separated, then it might be possible to break through the Italian forces." (add "if" after "that")
     Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:33, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • Northwest Europe, paragraph 1, sentence 2. Capitalize first word (when > When).
     Y Capitalised. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:33, 5 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
All good. I will promote to GA class. My apologies about the delay. Djmaschek (talk) 23:09, 15 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by RoySmith (talk14:38, 7 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Created by Hawkeye7 (talk). Self-nominated at 00:08, 16 September 2022 (UTC).Reply

  •   Hi Hawkeye7, review follows: article promoted to GA on 15 September; article is well written and cited inline throughout; sources used look reliable, though perhaps de Guignand's 1947 work might be a little close to the subject in personal terms and time it is used sparingly and the quote, which is the source for the hook, is attributed; I didn't pick up any overly close paraphrasing form the sources I accessed; hook is interesting, mentioned in the article and cited, AGF on offline source; I added a link to Don_(honorific)#Academia as I am not sure how well known the term is outside the Commonwealth (except perhaps from the Godfather!); a QPQ has been carried out; looks fine to me - Dumelow (talk) 08:06, 24 September 2022 (UTC)Reply