Talk:Education inequality in China

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

edit

  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Kqzhong. Peer reviewers: Reillybrooks, Emily.johnson135, Athomas1995.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 20:30, 17 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

edit

  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Aaronqjm.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 20:30, 17 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

edit

  This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 22 January 2019 and 8 May 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Alia Jiaying Li.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 20:30, 17 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Suggestions for Improvement

edit

Hey! Great work with getting this article started. I think the topic is very interesting and important. A few ideas I had for revision include expansion of content, more academic sources and blue links. With content, have you considered inequalities concerning students with disability and income? I would also suggest addressing the inequalities in education within urban spaces in China to keep the discussion neutral rather than solely focusing on the rural vs. urban inequality discussion. I also believe that the article can benefit from more academic resources. Some claims within the paragraphs are not cited until the end, so maybe you can find additional sources that support these claims as well as citing more frequently. I do not think it hurts to put the same source multiple times in a paragraph and this would defend all content you contribute to the page. As for blue links, I understand your article is in the initial stages but think that as you are editing in the near future you could add blue links along the way. These links may also provide you additional resources and information that you can connect back to your own article. Great job with everything you have done so far, I am really impressed! Reillybrooks (talk) 22:33, 21 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Hi! I agree with your choice to make this topic into its own article, and think you're in a really great position so far! If possible, I would suggest presenting multiple viewpoints on the topic, although you've done a great job of remaining neutral in tone. The information you have so far is excellent, and you just need to keep adding more. As you continue to expand your article, make sure you cite your sources frequently and add more subsections if you find enough information to warrant it. I agree with Reilly that you should add more blue links as you go, because I think the more blue links the clearer and more accessible your article becomes. I’m excited to see how your article turns out! Athomas1995 (talk) 23:58, 21 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Hey Kalina! The article looks very good so far. I think the best thing you can do right now is just expand! I think that once you have a little more information in the Factors section and can tie it back more strongly to the background on educational systems through history, your article will flow very well. I also think like Reillybrooks and Athomas said that adding more sources will help validate your information. Don't forget to show that you have references for the beginnings of sections and paragraphs, even if it's the same source for the whole section! This article is very well written, and I'm impressed with the way you presented the information and seem to have a vested interest and passion in the subject. Emily.johnson135 (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 01:34, 22 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Hey Kalina! Overall, I think you have made great progress with your article since the last time I reviewed it. I would first like to suggest adding another sub section to the article about another form of educational inequality like social status, family income, disability etc. I think this would provide further insight into the topic at hand. In addition to that, I would also recommend separating the history section from inequalities and making the three topics of stratification under their own section labeled "forms of inequality" or something of that nature. This idea is based on reviewing other education articles myself. I have noticed a common use of keeping a history section and factors of education inequality two separate sections. For clarity, I would go through and change the sentence structure and split some of your long sentences into two. I think this will enhance the readability and clarify the points the research you present is claiming. Finally, I would also start adding more blue links to relevant articles and blue linking your own article with relevant articles. Good luck! Reillybrooks (talk) 18:16, 4 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

Hi, Kalina!! Overall your article is very well-written and contains a lot of useful information on a topic that is not very accessible to the public. Images could be useful if you are able to find images related to your topic that add something to your article, but otherwise great work! Gilperkins (talk) 02:56, 5 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

A few comments

edit

Excellent contribution. However, as Reilly suggested, I think the article could benefit from some minor re-organization. I also think that you could expand the various subsections somewhat, and there should be a reasonable amount of literature on the subject for you to draw from. Please let me know if you have any questions or would like help with anything, this is an issue I'm very familiar with, particularly with respect to migrant education and rural-urban inequality. GavinCross (talk) 02:48, 19 November 2015 (UTC)Reply