Talk:Edward B. Barry

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Djmaschek in topic GA Review

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by Cielquiparle (talk11:17, 9 February 2023 (UTC)Reply

  • ... that rear admiral Edward B. Barry was once demerited for "very disorderly humming"? Source: Sullivan, Dwight (January 11, 2022). Capturing Aguinaldo: The Daring Raid to Seize the Philippine President at the Dawn of the American Century. Stackpole Books. p. 85. ISBN 978-0-8117-7153-5.   This might make a good quirky hook.(?)

Moved to mainspace by DatGuy (talk). Self-nominated at 21:44, 26 January 2023 (UTC). Note: As of October 2022, all changes made to promoted hooks will be logged by a bot. The log for this nomination can be found at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Edward B. Barry, so please watch a successfully closed nomination until the hook appears on the Main Page.Reply

General: Article is new enough and long enough

Policy compliance:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
  • Cited:   - Offline/paywalled citation accepted in good faith
  • Interesting:  

QPQ:  
Overall:   Just need the quotation to be directly cited and a QPQ then you're all set. Both hooks are interesting, so I have no preference.  Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 21:57, 26 January 2023 (UTC)Reply

@Bait30:   Done. DatGuyTalkContribs 22:02, 26 January 2023 (UTC)Reply
My bad, I just assumed that you needed to do a QPQ since I've seen you around so much.    Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 22:05, 26 January 2023 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 21:58, 29 March 2023 (UTC)Reply

Initial review

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I plan to GA review this article. Djmaschek (talk) 21:58, 29 March 2023 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    Review 1
    @DatGuy: There are a few distractions at home right now, so I haven't been able to work on this. In a day or two, I should be up to speed. Djmaschek (talk) 22:10, 3 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
    • Early life: Macedonian and Savannah should have the prefix USS.   Done
    • Early career, paragraph 1: Sabine should have the prefix USS.   Done GA reviewer fixed this.
    Here are six more bullet points. Djmaschek (talk) 03:48, 4 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
    • Early career, paragraph 2: "during the blockade of Callao" (Give the year please.) "Witnessed the sinking" (Use "scuttling" since that was what happened.)   Done
    • Early career, paragraph 2: "negotiating with Governor-General ... Casado" (Please add "of Puerto Rico". Otherwise, a reader might assume Cuba.)   Done
    • As commanding officer, paragraph 1: Marcellus should have the prefix USS.   Done -It's a mere collier, yet it's US Navy.
    • As commanding officer, paragraph 1: "On leaving the yard, the Brooklyn Eagle wrote that "with the departure for Norfolk of the battleship Kentucky to-morrow morning, one of the best liked officers who have ever did duty there will leave the Navy Yard". (This quote is from a 1906 newspaper account, so it needs to be moved to the end of paragraph 3, when Barry commanded the Kentucky.)   Done
    • As commanding officer, paragraph 2: "sailors under the Vicksburg". (Change "under" to "from".)   Done
    • As commanding officer, paragraph 4: "Following a lackluster stint at the helm". (Replace "at the helm" with "in command". Normally, "at the helm" can mean "in command". But, the previous sentence referred to a problem caused by a helmsman, and we don't want readers to think Barry was a mere helmsman.)   Done
    @DatGuy: Here are hopefully my last suggested edits. Djmaschek (talk) 22:07, 4 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
    • As commanding officer, paragraph 4: "...in a fleet with four other ships". (I think "fleet" is the wrong word. Suggest: "in a squadron" or "in company".)   Accepted
    • As commanding officer, paragraph 4: Alabama should have the prefix USS.   Not done -In the same sentence, Kearsarge has USS, but Alabama does not.
    • As commanding officer, paragraph 5: Please include Uriel Sebree's rank.   Done
    • C-in-C, US Pacific fleet, paragraph 1: West Virginia should have the prefix USS.   Done
    • C-in-C, US Pacific fleet, paragraph 1: Please include Giles G. Harber's rank.   Done GA reviewer enclosed "Giles G. Harber" in commas.
    • C-in-C, US Pacific fleet, paragraph 1: "by an English Bull Terrier who served as mascot of the USS Colorado named "Bunk"...". (Awkward wording: Move 'named Bunk' after 'English Bull Terrier'.)   Done
    b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a. (reference section):  
    b. (citations to reliable sources):  
    c. (OR):  
    d. (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a. (major aspects):  
    b. (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):  
    b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/fail:  

(Criteria marked   are unassessed)

  • @Djmaschek: I'm not a subject matter expert, but I was under the impression that "USS" must be used when first introducing a ship, and thereafter it can be referred to without the USS. Is this notion incorrect? DatGuyTalkContribs 08:49, 5 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
    Regarding "in a fleet with four other ships", I followed the wording used here: "Of a fleet of five battleships..." The rest, excluding the query above, is done. DatGuyTalkContribs 09:24, 5 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
    @DatGuy: You are correct about using USS only the first time a specific US Navy ship is mentioned. I overlooked the fact that you used USS prefixes for Vicksburg and Kentucky in the introduction. However, there are a number of US Navy vessels that still need the USS prefix. I know this seems tiresome, but we need to be consistent. See "Not done" items above.
    @Djmaschek: No worries. I've performed the requested USS changes. Regarding capitalising rear admiral before Giles B. Harber in the CINCPACFLT section, I'm not sure of the correct term to use but think of the sentence being "he succeeded the retiring rear admiral (who is Giles B. Harber)" rather than referring specifically to Giles and using rear admiral as a title. If that makes sense. DatGuyTalkContribs 12:58, 6 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
    @DatGuy: GA class. I made two minor updates. Thank you for your interesting article submission about a successful but controversial individual. Djmaschek (talk) 19:47, 10 April 2023 (UTC)Reply