Talk:Edward Stanley (cricketer)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 08:52, 2 July 2019 (UTC)

Hopefully, the World Cup has taught me enough about cricket to review this article. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 08:52, 2 July 2019 (UTC)

Lead

• Is it fair to say his appearance was unsuccessful just because he didn't bowl or score? Maybe "inconsequential" instead?
  • Weakened to "not successful". Not scoring is still consequential, so that didn't feel quite right. Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

Life and career

• Is south-east supposed to be hyphenated? (I'm not familiar with British English.)
  • It's pretty ambiguous in BrEng - Chambers Dictionary favours the hyphen, Cambridge one word. I'm ambivalent. Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
• Link vicar and/or briefly explain what it is.
  • Just linked it. Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
• Was the mile race within his school, or for the county, or country?
  • No more detail was provided, so I weakened it from "the mile-race" to "a mile-race". Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

County cricket appearance

• Newspaper reports on the first day's play either listed ten players, omitting Fowler, or included him as 'absent'. <<<=== Add that they left off or were unaware of Stanley.
  • Added. Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
• Despite these reports however <<<=== "however" is redundant
  • Removed. Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
• Stanley was posted to Manchester at the time as a Captain in the 2nd Regiment of Foot. Stanley was qualified to play for Somerset on the basis of his birth in the county, and did come out to bat in the first innings, but had to retire hurt after being hit by the second delivery he faced. <<<=== Split it as the following so that the first sentence describes the lead-up and the second describes the match: Stanley was posted to Manchester at the time as a Captain in the 2nd Regiment of Foot and was qualified to play for Somerset on the basis of his birth in the county. He did come out to bat in the first innings, but had to retire hurt after being hit by the second delivery he faced.
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
• You should mention that he batted at number eleven in the first innings, before mentioning it for the second.
  • Good point, done. Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
• Somerset lost the match by ten wickets. <<<=== I always wonder this about cricket in general, but is it worth also mentioning the score and/or how many balls were left?
  • It's impossible to say how many balls were left as this wasn't a limited over contest. Listing the full score for each of the four innings would seem a bit too in depth for a player's article in my opinion. Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

Overall

• I don't have access to the sources, so I'll assume they suffice.
• No dab links.

Prose looks solid. Just a few minor things. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 09:16, 2 July 2019 (UTC)

Oh, completely forgot about this after the initial talk page notifications. Will take a look at cleaning it up over the weekend! Harrias ^talk 14:22, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

@Sportsfan77777: Okay, I've taken a look, and hopefully all sorted now. Harrias ^talk 17:08, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

Looks good, passing! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 19:57, 12 July 2019 (UTC)