Talk:El Chico del Apartamento 512/GA3

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 23:08, 16 April 2012 (UTC) Unfortunately I must fail this article for sub-standard prose which makes it fail criterion 1a. I have listed some examples of problematic sentences below:

• "The song was written and produced by Selena's brother and music producer, A.B. Quintanilla III, lead keyboardist of the group, Ricky Vela, Joshua Munoz, Bebu Silvetti, Steven Torres and James Moore." - confusing as to who is whom
• "Selena promoted the song during her Amor Prohibido Tour, the song was included in every venue." - missing word or wrong punctuation
• "El chico del apartamento 512" one of the first songs composed for Selena's fifth studio album..." - missing word
• The single was released the day before Selena was murdered, which jeopardize any further development of a music video." - ungrammatical and confusing. Were plans for a music video underway?
• "which mainly had an alternative ending" - how can it 'mainly' have an alternative ending?

Comma use is an issue throughout the article, too. I suggest you have a native English speaker copy-edit the article before bringing it back to GAN. I look forward to seeing this article improve. —Andrew_stalk 23:08, 16 April 2012 (UTC)