Talk:El Gallito/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:03, 19 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

Shall be taking on this review. MWright96 (talk) 07:03, 19 August 2020 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead

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  • "on who El Gallitos ring persona," - Gallito's

Professional wrestling career

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  • "El Gallito ("The Little Rooster") started his professional wrestling career as a mascota for El El Gallo" - the first "El" is redundant
  • "As a mascota, he portrayed a diminutive version of El Gallo, complete with the same rooster character as El Gallo." - and competed as the same rooster character as him.
  • Cockscomb does not need to begin with a capital letter
  • "As a mascota he would accompany El Gallo to the ring, designed mainly - was created primarily
  • "to appeal to kids" - more formal; children
  • "and help El Gallo portray" - and assist El Gallo to portray

Micro-Estrellas division (2017–present)

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  • "and his fellow mascotas Mije and fellow Zacarias el Perico to help establish" - repetition of the word "fellow"
  • "Gallito, Mije, Angelito, and Chamuel took on Microman, Atomo, Guapito, and Zacarias . In the end, Microman pinned Chamuel to win the tournament while - Gallito, Mije, Angelito, and Chamuel took on Microman, Atomo, Guapito, and Zacarias, which saw Micropan pin Chamuel to win the tournament while Galliot was the fourth to be eliminated from the match.
  • "four weeks later the Micro-Estrellas" - Four weeks later, the Micro-Estrellas
  • "With the popularity of the Micro-Estrellas" - think there maybe a word missing from this piece of text

Independent circuit (2017–present)

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  • "While working for CMLL, El Gallito, like all CMLL workers" - repetition of working/workers
  • "While working for CMLL, El Gallito, like all CMLL workers, is allowed to take independent circuit bookings on days he is not needed by CMLL." - too much repetition of the term "CMLL"
  • "His first non-CMLL match was on June 14, 2017. on a Promociones El Cholo show in Tijuana, Baja California," - the period in the middle of this sentence is unneeded
  • "which featured Gallito and Microman defeating Mije and Zacarias." - saw

References

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  • Reference 2 looks like it's missing the page numbers and ISBN number?
  • Reference 4 from The Telegraph should include Agence France-Presse as the agency that provided the story

Am going to put the review on hold to allow the nominator to respond/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 13:21, 19 August 2020 (UTC)Reply