Talk:Elegy (The X-Files)/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Ruby2010 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 03:30, 6 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

I can't resist an episode that aired on my birthday! Will review it soon. Ruby 2010/2013 03:30, 6 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

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  • Lead's first para could use a copy-edit (too many sentences begin with "the episode..."
  • "the performance of Anderson was especially praised." -- you mention Anderson before explaining who she is
  • "...along with the words "She is me.". " -- double period
  • You say the episode is "unconnected to the series' wider mythology" but then mention Scully's cancer. I haven't seen the series, but what I've picked up on, isn't her cancer part of the mythology? Or am I mistaken?
  • "...but many were reluctant..." - I would re-write to "...but many establishments were reluctant..."
  • Where is the Thunderbird Bowling Center located?
  • What is a pinspotter carriage? Is there a good wikilink for this?
  • "then-unmarried wife" - you mean future wife?
  • "The series was allowed to filming in the location..." typo
  • Italicize the Shearman and Pearson book
  • "greater attention to the relationship... -- where does the quote end?
  • "...lauded Anerson's performance..."
  • in a manner that was "offensive at works and just plain idiotic at best". -- is that supposed to be "worst"?
  • The image could be enlarged

Otherwise, looks good. Placing on hold for seven days. Ruby 2010/2013 21:15, 11 January 2013 (UTC)Reply

I believe I've gotten everything. Thanks for reviewing!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 22:51, 11 January 2013 (UTC)Reply
Looks good. Passing for GA. Ruby 2010/2013 17:49, 12 January 2013 (UTC)Reply