Talk:Elementary School Musical (The Simpsons)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Albacore (talk · contribs) 19:00, 11 December 2011 (UTC)

Will review shortly. Albacore (talk) 19:00, 11 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• File:Elementary School Musical.jpg is a bit high-quality for Wikipedia's use– please reduce quality.
  •  Done
• A DAB
  •  Done
• Be consistent in dating styles (i.e in ref 2 Porter, Rick (2010-08-02)) and in ref 7 (Todd VanDerWerff (September 27, 2010))

• Is the publisher in refs 12 and 13 TVbythenumbers or TV by the Numbers?
  •  Done, fixed to consistant spaces
• What makes you think movieweb.com (ref 1) is reliable?
  • Al Jean was being interviewed by them, and he reveals minor details about the episode.
• who immediately seeks out the nearest place to buy weed weed--> marijuana
  •  Done
• When Marge takes her home at the end of the week, she has trouble she--> Lisa, for clarity
  •  Done
• She runs away from home and seeks out Ethan and Kurt in "Sprooklyn," described by them as being the artistic hotbed of Springfield. 1. "being" could probably be removed 2. possibly quotes around "artistic hotbed of Springfield" 3."described by them"--> described by the counselors" for clarity

• However, she soon learns that they have grossly exaggerated; the area is a run-down slum and they actually work at a sandwich shop.--> However, she soon learns that they have grossly exaggerated the area, which is really a run-down slum, and that Ethan and Kurt actually work at a sandwich shop.

• The three had previously revealed their involvement on Twitter in February 2010. involvement with what?

• The opening flyby gag featured Otto in a Partridge Family-like bus 1. Link "Otto" to the appropriate article. 2. The first two sentences after that quotebox could be merged for flow. Personally I'd use the transition "with" for the merger instead of "and".

• link "Fox" on first appearance

• It was succeeded by episodes of The Cleveland Show and Family Guy. Not sure this sentence is particularly relevant.

• Two instances of "18-49" which should be "18–49"

• Although he expressed satisfaction towards many aspects of the episode such as?

• ...guest appearances of Michele, Riley, and Monteith, and exclaimed: "stated" is more professional in place of "exclaimed"

• Finally, check to make sure all the issues from the previous GA review above have been addressed.

Overall just some prose issues that need addressing. I'll take another look over when these comments are addressed, and will put the GA on hold for a week. Albacore (talk) 20:09, 11 December 2011 (UTC)

Should be good now. :) —DAP388 (talk) 01:08, 13 December 2011 (UTC)

Re-looking

• which takes up one entire side of a building. one->> an
  •  Done
• Ref 6 is using incorrect date format
  •  Done
• Can anything else be added on the episode? When I compare it to other Simpsons GAs, this one seems short.

No other info can be added, I'm afraid. :/ —DAP388 (talk) 13:40, 15 December 2011 (UTC)

Pass, looks and reads like a GA to me. Albacore (talk) 22:04, 15 December 2011 (UTC)