Talk:Elizabeth Randles/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:41, 4 April 2016 (UTC)Reply


Looks interesting! I'll have this to you tomorrow. JAGUAR  20:41, 4 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments

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  • "Elizabeth was taught by her father, who was organist at the Holywell parish church and was also blind" - who else was also blind? This is the first mention of anyone being blind
  • "Elizabeth went on to tour the country as a child, performing with John Parry" - I noticed that there are two John Parry's, so perhaps a disambiguation here is needed. I originally clicked on the John Parry link in the biography section, and wondered how Elizabeth could have played with somebody who died in 1782! I then realised there were two people with the same name, so some kind of notice would benefit the reader
  • "Perhaps due to his lack of sight, his had parents placed him to be trained" - remove 'had'?
  • "under the blind harpist John Parry, where he excelled" - would whom he excelled under sound better? Feel free to ignore
  • "One the night of the concert" - on
  • "in Liverpool Her musical skill at" - missing full stop
  • No dead links
  • No dab links

I just realised that the confusion with the two John Parry's is addressed in the first note. This is a great article, I enjoyed reading it. It's compact and comprehensive for the subject, hence the fairly short review. Once all of the above are clarified then it should have no problem passing.   JAGUAR  21:11, 4 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

All done, thank you very much for your speedy review, we hope you enjoyed reading about her as much as we did. P.S. We have other women waiting for GA reviews (not Welsh ones though) if you have some spare time! ツStacey (talk) 21:41, 4 April 2016 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for addressing them! Without any further ado I'll promote this, it meets the criteria. Nice work. I'll be happy to take the other GANs you currently have.   JAGUAR  19:15, 5 April 2016 (UTC)Reply