Talk:Elizabeth Stuart, Queen of Bohemia

Article Additions

I wrote my University dissertation on Elizabeth of Bohemia and believe that I can add quite a bit to this article. It would however become quite a major edit.

I propose the following:

1. To add more information about Elizabeth's early life, i.e. her education, relationship with siblings and contemporary opinions.
2. To add a section with details of Elizabeth's suitors, as the search for a suitable husband was important in her life
3. To add further details regarding the marriage ceremony
4. To add a section titled 'Electress Palatine' with information regarding the situation in the Palatine upon Elizabeth's arrival
5. To expand the Queen of Bohemia section
6. To expand the 'Exile' section to include information for the period 1620-1632, which is not covered in the article currently

I can provide suitable references for the information I propose to add to the article, and can considerably expand the current bibliography section.

I would appreciate any suggestions to the above proposal

Thanks Danielle — Preceding unsigned comment added by MI9to5 (talk • contribs) 21:18, 5 December 2012 (UTC)

Danielle - be bold, and please go right ahead. Especially if you are an authority on the subject (and it sounds like you are), you don't need permission from anyone else.

There is anyway much of interest about her here: A Point of View: The Winter Queen of Bohemia, by Lisa Jardine, BBC Magazine, 24 February 2013. Onanoff (talk) 11:08, 24 February 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. I am currently writing the proposed changes. I hope to have the re-write complete over the weekend and make the article live early next week :) This is my first contribution to Wikipedia so just getting to grips with all the formatting. Fingers crossed the revision is well received. Danielle MI9to5 (talk) 22:29, 27 March 2013 (UTC)

Danielle, your outline looks impressive and I encourage you to improve the article with (cited) information. But you wrote "To add a section titled 'Electress Palatine' with information regarding the situation in the Palatine upon Elizabeth's arrival" <emphasis added>. I hope this was a typo and that your edits will reflect the fact that "Palatine" is an adjective used in lieu of a territorial description (e.g., "Elector Palatine", "Palatine rights", "Prince Palatine Rupert"), whereas "Palatinate" is a proper noun which refers to a region (Pfalz), e.g. "the Palatinate, Germany", "Rhenish Palatinate", "Electoral Palatinate", etc. FactStraight (talk) 05:31, 29 March 2013 (UTC)

I'm looking forward to reading it! Hchc2009 (talk) 07:43, 29 March 2013 (UTC)

I have finished writing the proposed changes and have edited the live article. This is my first edit on Wikipedia, so it was quite an ambitious one. I hope the changes are well received and I welcome feedback both positive and negative, as I hope to edit more articles over the coming months. Thanks MI9to5 (talk) 19:47, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

Congratulations and thank you for expanding the article on behalf of everyone who will come here seeking information about the Winter Queen! I'll do some copy-editing, but I must point out that close paraphrasing should be avoided (something I too find hard to accomplish). Also, there is no need to quote phrases such as: "several mementoes of her early love of books exist". Surtsicna (talk) 20:43, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. I intend to give the article a fresh read through in a week or so, so there may be a few more changes on the way. I made a significant effort not to paraphrase but as you mention it can be hard to accomplish. I have tried to put what I have read into my own words and use quotations to highlight points and I'm sure that a good 75% of the article is my own words but hopefully when I take a fresh look I may be able to bring in more of my own words. I will also take a closer look at some of the quoted phrases that I have used and see if there is a need for the direct quotation. MI9to5 (talk) 23:39, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

Once again, excellent job, but much, much less than 25% of the article may be closely paraphrased or quoted. Anyway, I am sure you will fix this. Good luck! Surtsicna (talk) 10:48, 31 March 2013 (UTC)

Wrong place of birth

I corrected the main article to be Falkland Palace rather than Dunfermline Palace, to agree with the info box on the right ref: www.britannica.com/biography/Elizabeth-Stuart 153.98.68.196 (talk) 13:30, 6 September 2016 (UTC)

Englischer Bau

In German, adjectives are inflected. While "englischer Bau" is the citation form (used in isolation), the context in this article requires

creating between 1610 and 1613 the "Englischen Bau" (i.e. English Building) for her

at least from a German viewpoint.

Helmut w.k. (talk) 14:34, 5 October 2017 (UTC)

"Electress?"

I wonder if a woman can actually be called an electress though she has nothing whatever to do with electing. She merely happens to be married to a guy who has the theoretical right to do some electing. In the case of Elizabeth, of course, her husband never did any electing either.--dunnhaupt (talk) 15:25, 30 March 2018 (UTC)

Children in the info-box

are the children of king James and the siblings of Elizabeth Stuart. Adelfrank (talk) 14:22, 2 July 2020 (UTC)

The sentence 'As the daughter of a reigning monarch, the hand of the young Elizabeth was seen as a very desirable prize' is ungrammatical. It was Elizabeth herself, not her hand, that was the daughter of a reigning monarch. Suggest you change to something like, 'Since Elizabeth was the daughter of a reigning monarch, her hand was seen as a very desirable prize.' — Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.31.67.35 (talk) 22:27, 26 January 2024 (UTC)