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Reviewer: Khanate General (talk · contribs) 06:02, 20 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

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Grammar/spelling/MoS review

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  • The captions for the images should not end in a period when the caption is a sentence fragment.
  • Some of the captions do not explain their relevance to the article. For example, instead of "President Jimmy Carter," the caption for File:JimmyCarterPortrait2.jpg should briefly describe Carter's relationship to EMI.
  • EMI promotes integrated emergency management principles and practices through application of the NRF, NIMS, and an all-hazards approach.
    • The indefinite article a or definite article the is missing before application.
  • To take a on-campus course at EMI, applicants must meet the selection criteria and prerequisites specified for each course.
    • The sentence uses the wrong indefinite article. Change a to an.
  • EMI maintains a strategic partnerships with Frederick Community College.
    • The sentence should not use an indefinite article with a plural noun.
  • Auxiliarists are expected to take EMI courses that will help them to understand the Incident Command System's organization, basic terminology and common responsibilities. and In addition to its resident training program, EMI disseminates centrally developed training materials through a comprehensive national training program in the United States territories, and trusts.
    • The Oxford comma appears inconsistently throughout the article. The Manual of Style recommends choosing one style and using it consistently.
  • Since 1979 EMI has been under the Federal Emergency Management Agency, and had previously been under the United States Department of Defense.
    • Remove the comma after Agency. A comma should only be used when the conjunction appears before an independent clause.
  • The Student Center, built in 1956, is the location of a game room, pub and recreational activities.
    • Again, the Oxford comma is used inconsistently.
  • The Monument, is the centerpiece of the EMI's main campus in the Emmitsburg.
    • Remove the extra comma after Monument.
  • NETC then became the home for the National Fire Academy (NFA) and the re-named Staff College which become the Emergency Management Institute (EMI), to reflect its now broader training role.
    • Which should be changed to that. Which is a nonrestrictive clause. You also need change become to the past tense.
  • EMI also enjoys close relations with several nationally recognized professional emergency management and related organizations and has interfaced with them through training, conferences, and exercises.
    • The sentence structure is awkward because of its length. You should consider splitting it into two separate sentences.
  • In 1997, EMI was awarded the W. Edwards Deming Outstanding Training Award by the United States Department of Agriculture Graduate School at the Excellence in Government Conference.
    • Change the passive-voice sentence to active voice (e.g. the United States Department of Agriculture Graduate School awarded EMI)
  • The Institute hosts the National Preparedness Annual Training and Exercise Conference which is attended by Regional Training Managers, State Training Officers and Exercise Training Officers, State Administrative Authority Officials, and subject matter experts from a broad sector of the preparedness community.
    • Which should be changed to that. Which is a nonrestrictive clause.
  • EMI and NFA have collaborated on curricula and programs since their inception, and share in the cost of operation of NETC.
    • Remove the comma after inception. A comma should only be used when the conjunction appears before an independent clause.
  • Region IX, PAO Serving: American Samoa, CNMI,Guam, Hawaii
    • There is a space missing between Guam and the comma.

Close paraphrasing/copyright violation

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  • Earwig's Copyvio Detector reports that a copyright violation is very likely.
  • There are entire paragraphs that were blatantly plagiarized word-for-word from the official EMI home page.
  • Random spot checks for close paraphrasing:
    • EMI's main campus is located within the National Emergency Training Center (NETC) in Emmitsburg, Maryland. NETC is located 12 miles south of Gettysburg, Pennsylvania, 75 miles north of Washington, DC, and 50 miles northwest of Baltimore, Maryland. The 107-acre campus is shared by the United States Fire Administration (USFA), the National Fire Academy (NFA), the Field Personnel Operations Division, and the Satellite Procurement Office. All these components are part of FEMA, one of the four directorates in DHS. The campus has fully equipped air-conditioned classrooms, lodging for students, a Learning Resource Center, and dining and recreational facilities. There also are several specialized facilities, such as the Simulation and Exercise Lab, a television studio Preparedness Network (PREPnet), and two computer laboratories that are integral to the instruction of many courses. (article)
    • The National Emergency Training Center (NETC) in Emmitsburg, Maryland, offers the finest in educational resources. The campus is located 12 miles south of Gettysburg, Pennsylvania, 75 miles north of Washington, DC, and 50 miles northwest of Baltimore, Maryland. The 107-acre campus is shared by the United States Fire Administration (USFA), the National Fire Academy (NFA), the Emergency Management Institute (EMI), the Field Personnel Operations Division, and the Satellite Procurement Office. All these components are part of FEMA, one of the four directorates in DHS. The NETC campus has fully equipped air-conditioned classrooms, lodging for students, a Learning Resource Center, and dining and recreational facilities. There also are several specialized facilities, such as the Simulation and Exercise Lab, a television studio Preparedness Network (PREPnet), and two computer laboratories that are integral to the instruction of many courses. (source)
      • The paragraph was plagiarized from the source.
    • The Emergency Management Institute (EMI) of the United States Federal Emergency Management Agency serves as the national focal point for the development and delivery of emergency management training to enhance the capabilities of state, territorial, local, and tribal government officials; volunteer organizations; FEMA's disaster workforce; other Federal agencies; and the public and private sectors to minimize the impact of disasters and emergencies on the American public. EMI curricula are structured to meet the needs of this diverse audience with an emphasis on separate organizations working together in all-hazards emergencies to save lives and protect property. (article)
    • Through its courses and programs, EMI serves as the national focal point for the development and delivery of emergency management training to enhance the capabilities of federal, state, local, and tribal government officials, volunteer organizations, and the public and private sectors to minimize the impact of disasters on the American public. EMI curricula are structured to meet the needs of this diverse audience with an emphasis on how the various elements work together in emergencies to save lives and protect property. Instruction focuses on the four phases of emergency management: mitigation, preparedness, response, and recovery. (source)
      • The paragraph was plagiarized from the source.
    • Instruction focuses on the four phases of emergency management: mitigation, preparedness, response, and recovery. EMI develops courses and administers resident and non-resident training programs in areas such as natural hazards (earthquakes, hurricanes, floods, dam safety), technological hazards (hazardous materials, terrorism, radiological incidents, chemical stockpile emergency preparedness), professional development, leadership, instructional methodology, exercise design and evaluation, information technology, public information, integrated emergency management, and train-the-trainers. (article)
    • Instruction focuses on the four phases of emergency management: mitigation, preparedness, response, and recovery. EMI develops courses and administers resident and non-resident training programs in areas such as natural hazards (earthquakes, hurricanes, floods, dam safety), technological hazards (hazardous materials, terrorism, radiological incidents, chemical stockpile emergency preparedness), professional development, leadership, instructional methodology, exercise design and evaluation, information technology, public information, integrated emergency management, and train-the-trainers. (source)
      • The paragraph was plagiarized from the source.
    • Approximately 5,500 participants attend resident courses each year while 100,000 individuals participate in non-resident programs sponsored by EMI and conducted by state emergency management agencies under cooperative agreements with FEMA. Another 150,000 individuals participate in EMI-supported exercises, and approximately 1,000 individuals participate in the Chemical Stockpile Emergency Preparedness Program (CSEPP). (article)
    • Approximately 5,500 participants attend resident courses each year while 100,000 individuals participate in non-resident programs sponsored by EMI and conducted by state emergency management agencies under cooperative agreements with FEMA. Another 150,000 individuals participate in EMI-supported exercises, and approximately 1,000 individuals participate in the Chemical Stockpile Emergency Preparedness Program (CSEPP). (source)
      • The paragraph was plagiarized from the source.

Neutrality, sources, and other comments

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  • The article is not neutral. It reads like a promotional brochure for EMI, and considering all the copyright violations, large parts of the article may have been copied directly from EMI promotional materials.
  • The article is barely cited. There are seven paragraphs without a single source.
  • The references are not properly formatted. You should use the Cite Web template for online sources.
  • The article is stable.
  • There are no disambiguation links.
  • Several of the external links no longer work.

Summary

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The article is riddled with problems. Several paragraphs were plagiarized directly from the EMI website, the article is not neutral, most of the article is not cited, and there are many grammatical errors. It is highly unlikely that this article will pass. I have also tagged the article as a copyvio.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 07:22, 20 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

It's been seven days and the nominator has not made any changes to the article. Considering all the plagiarism and copyvio issues, the article still has a long way to go before it meets the GA criteria. As it stands, I will have to fail this nomination.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 08:02, 28 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
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